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Reviews by Jonnyjames
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Not really my sense of humour. But I did find it an interesting enough read.
Was structured well and continued to flow nicely.
The lead character wasn't really edgy enough. It was boarding cliche of a writer for me personally. But it was a massive undertaking to write a story about a writer. Maybe strange traits that are uncommon to writers might help. Not so sure really.
Thanks...
Not really my sense of humour. But I did find it an interesting enough read.
Was structured well and continued to flow nicely.
The lead character wasn't really edgy enough. It was boarding cliche of a writer for me personally. But it was a massive undertaking to write a story about a writer. Maybe strange traits that are uncommon to writers might help. Not so sure really.
Thanks. Don't take this as a bad review at all. Just more a note that it not to my taste.
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I really enjoyed this short film about covering old tattoos, subsequently I have booked for myself to have a cover done.
I really enjoys the high speed montage.
A little bit of a strange bringing have monk lip syncing on camera but the audio is vo.
Strange but I did really enjoy the watch.
At one point the music became too much and I had to turn it down and then turn it back...
I really enjoyed this short film about covering old tattoos, subsequently I have booked for myself to have a cover done.
I really enjoys the high speed montage.
A little bit of a strange bringing have monk lip syncing on camera but the audio is vo.
Strange but I did really enjoy the watch.
At one point the music became too much and I had to turn it down and then turn it back up again
hope this was constructive.
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Firstly I really enjoyed the story although, I must admit I did find it, a pretty difficult read. Some of the action paragraphs weren't necessarily focused on the "visual" aspects of the story. I felt I was reading a first draft and I really don't think anyone should be reading this draft. Alot more research should have gone into the characters, especially your protagonist....
Firstly I really enjoyed the story although, I must admit I did find it, a pretty difficult read. Some of the action paragraphs weren't necessarily focused on the "visual" aspects of the story. I felt I was reading a first draft and I really don't think anyone should be reading this draft. Alot more research should have gone into the characters, especially your protagonist.. I would also take care to read the script yourself before you post it online for others to read, for example, some of the sentences don't make any sense. realistically you could benefit from holding onto your script for a month without thinking about it once and after the thirty days take it out to do some serious hard work on it. Read some other screenplays such as Shaw shank Redemption, the Usual Suspects and Chinatown. You've got to learn how to make it flow alot easier and I feel you could cut 10 to 15 pages in length. congrats on finishing your screenplay. many thanks and hope you consider some of this was blunt but fair.
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Submissions by Jonnyjames
No submissions (yet)
Reviews by Jonnyjames
3
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Not really my sense of humour. But I did find it an interesting enough read.
Was structured well and continued to flow nicely.
The lead character wasn't really edgy enough. It was boarding cliche of a writer for me personally. But it was a massive undertaking to write a story about a writer. Maybe strange traits that are uncommon to writers might help. Not so sure really.
Thanks...
Not really my sense of humour. But I did find it an interesting enough read.
Was structured well and continued to flow nicely.
The lead character wasn't really edgy enough. It was boarding cliche of a writer for me personally. But it was a massive undertaking to write a story about a writer. Maybe strange traits that are uncommon to writers might help. Not so sure really.
Thanks. Don't take this as a bad review at all. Just more a note that it not to my taste.
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I really enjoyed this short film about covering old tattoos, subsequently I have booked for myself to have a cover done.
I really enjoys the high speed montage.
A little bit of a strange bringing have monk lip syncing on camera but the audio is vo.
Strange but I did really enjoy the watch.
At one point the music became too much and I had to turn it down and then turn it back...
I really enjoyed this short film about covering old tattoos, subsequently I have booked for myself to have a cover done.
I really enjoys the high speed montage.
A little bit of a strange bringing have monk lip syncing on camera but the audio is vo.
Strange but I did really enjoy the watch.
At one point the music became too much and I had to turn it down and then turn it back up again
hope this was constructive.
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Firstly I really enjoyed the story although, I must admit I did find it, a pretty difficult read. Some of the action paragraphs weren't necessarily focused on the "visual" aspects of the story. I felt I was reading a first draft and I really don't think anyone should be reading this draft. Alot more research should have gone into the characters, especially your protagonist....
Firstly I really enjoyed the story although, I must admit I did find it, a pretty difficult read. Some of the action paragraphs weren't necessarily focused on the "visual" aspects of the story. I felt I was reading a first draft and I really don't think anyone should be reading this draft. Alot more research should have gone into the characters, especially your protagonist.. I would also take care to read the script yourself before you post it online for others to read, for example, some of the sentences don't make any sense. realistically you could benefit from holding onto your script for a month without thinking about it once and after the thirty days take it out to do some serious hard work on it. Read some other screenplays such as Shaw shank Redemption, the Usual Suspects and Chinatown. You've got to learn how to make it flow alot easier and I feel you could cut 10 to 15 pages in length. congrats on finishing your screenplay. many thanks and hope you consider some of this was blunt but fair.
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Jonnyjames on 09/28/2011