KSisk90 

member since 03/02/2012 | last login 08/18/2014

Born in 1990, live in Southern California. Currently enrolled in Cypress College, my major is Radiology Tech. I've decided I need to start doing something creative, and have been using writing and TSL as an outlet. My latest piece is a rewrite...

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Born in 1990, live in Southern California.
Currently enrolled in Cypress College, my major is Radiology Tech.
I've decided I need to start doing something creative, and have been using writing and TSL as an outlet.
My latest piece is a rewrite of my short story, "Grandma Ellie".
Lately it seems like I'm always thinking of ideas for stories.

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Reviews by KSisk90 27

  • by KSisk90 on 03/25/2012
    As for formatting it was easy to read and flowed well, good job on that. The opening paragraph was good, really captured my attention making me want to read more good job on that. Some things I noticed: He crept up on the corpse, not letting his guard down for a second, and keeping his weapon aimed where he last saw the beast, but it had disappeared again; however, it had... read
  • A review of In a Field
    by KSisk90 on 03/25/2012
    As for formatting you need to put the page number in the header so its easier to review. All caps looks a bit silly to me, I think you could try another way of showing that it is a tense moment, like bellowed, screamed, yelled etc. Some things I noticed: You use far too many commas, your sentences run on. I didn't really understand all that happened, felt a bit lost. With... read
  • A review of Bank Robbah
    by KSisk90 on 03/23/2012
    As for formatting you need to put your page number in the header. And you need to indent new paragraphs. Other than that it was easy to read and flowed well. I liked the opening paragraph, really grabbed my attention making me want to read more. Some things I noticed: At least the safe right in the middle. safe is right in the middle. When you have a character thinking,... read
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Comments About KSisk90 17

  • asankagurusinghe on 03/25/2012

    Thanks for the very careful review, it was very gratifying and I made the correction. Probably young people from where the story is set would say the slang was difficult to understand because it was used wrong. I intended some of it to be intuitive but I suppose it was dense at times. My feeling is that a lot of people like Leanne use dense slang as a way of taking on an identity (everyone does to an extent)- hers as tough and untouchable.
  • vieira4 on 03/22/2012

    Hi. Thanks again for another review!

    When I said behind him, I think I meant in front of his back, which is like standing behind somebody. I'll tidy that up. When George said, 'Police probably Olympiakos fans', he missed out the 'are' because he doesn't speak English very well. I'll try and make that clearer too.

    Basically, Linda ends up going out with that Gabriel Olateju guy that she obsessed over from afar in happier times. Her friend Rebecca managed to tell him Linda's story, and he thought she was a great person and the rest, as they say, is history. I'm not sure about the ending, tbh. I wrote that story ages ago, and didn't upload immediately as I thought the ending was lame, but when I read it through again yesterday, it seemed better. Thanks again!
  • vieira4 on 03/18/2012

    Hi. Thanks so much for your kind review of, "He Arrived Home". Thanks for the corrections you did. Well done for working out that players' numbers were involved. As you can see, they've got silly. My mum wishes they still just wore one to eleven.

    I sorted out those errors you mentioned, so thanks. 'De riguer' means normal, the done thing. The groin injury part - I've never had one but I remember my friend at uni had one, and he was describing it to me. It only hurts when you make the ball-kicking motion. Thanks again!
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