Rikard Bjork

A review of The Tree

by Rikard Bjork on 06/11/2012

I thought the sets were excellent with all the small details that gave the sets character. The sound was great with the exception of the so-called dialogue which reminded me of the when the parents spoke in the Peanuts cartoons. I thought maybe you could come up with something very unique for there voices. I thought you should have included a heavy coat and scarf to emphasize... read

A STORY OF INTEREST

A review of The Killing Years

by Rikard Bjork on 03/04/2012

Three things: 1) I love much of your descriptive action lines. 2) You have a few misspellings/grammatical errors and 3) The idea of having a time machine – okay, the audience will go there; but having one person appear at the same time as himself in a young form and an older form is too difficult for the audience to take on. Some details: A)Spelling. FORENSIC AGENTS dust... read

Undercover or Over the Top

A review of A Change Would Do You Good

by Rikard Bjork on 01/25/2012

1) Comedies should be about 90 pages long so start cutting. The opening montage is longer then it needs to be. 2) Kate sings the song from the movie WORKING GIRL. For this to work, it has to be a really popular movie/song that everyone is familiar with and I don’t think this qualifies. 3) A number of the jokes need to be ratcheted up – work on them to make them funnier or... read

Honesty is the Best Policy

A review of The Dealbreaker (rewrite, formerly "Bait and Switch")

by Rikard Bjork on 01/22/2012

You have a script with nice dialogue and some interesting characters. This story will grab the attention of a large segment of the movie going audience. The basic story is very similar to many stories out there. Also, I feel the script is too long; you should cut it down about fifteen pages. You can cut out some of the last scenes and/or shorten some scenes. For example, the... read

The Modern Greek Myth

A review of Demeter and Persephone

by Rikard Bjork on 01/22/2012

I like how you interweave the people with the plants, bushes, flowers and the geography; then, interweave the modern age with ancient Greece. I think you have brought in a lot of characters for a story this short. It would help to have additional descriptions of the characters which allows for one to envision them easier in one’s mind. For me to try to keep track of the characters,... read

War is Not Pretty

A review of Silent Liberty

by Rikard Bjork on 01/21/2012

I feel the titles and credits should have been done in a simple single color font black or white. I think the color and “glitz” takes away from the story. A shot of the woman and little girl watching and reacting to the lead character taking off would have been important. Also, a shot of the lead character catching a glimpse of the “bad” guy in the distance holding the coat... read

Radio Killed the Video Store

A review of Guernica

by Rikard Bjork on 01/21/2012

I felt like it was more a music video; the film was for the music rather then the music for the film. However there were nice visuals and the actors did a good job of portraying their emotions without the use of dialogue. The use of time was done efficiently. The editing sequences were good.

Here's Censorship!

A review of It's Just A Movie

by Rikard Bjork on 01/21/2012

I feel you have done an excellent job with development of a story, editing and filming. The film has excellent pacing and no seconds were wasted seconds. The story was constantly moving forward. My only criticism is that censorship as a theme is overdone. The other important point is to give the “bad guy” a positive attribute that the audience can relate to; such as he states,... read

No Talkie

A review of Christmas Compunction

by Rikard Bjork on 01/18/2012

I thought this was pretty good. The dialogue text at the beginning should have been left a little longer to allow the viewer to read it in a relax state. A nice job was done with the "animation". For props, it appeared you used what you had; smart move. You were able to "tell" a complete story in a short amount of time.

A Couple of Points

A review of UNGODLY

by Rikard Bjork on 01/14/2012

For accents, many writers state that it is better when describing the character in the action lines; state there he/she has a certain accent rather then write all the dialogue with the accent. It makes for easier reading of the script. It would be nice to add more and heavier tension between Sills and York. Perhaps York’s men befriend Still’s son to intentionally irritate... read

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