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Lucidity, a good concept, but needs work.

A review of Lucidity

by Unknownwriter9 on 12/26/2011

I was assigned your screen play "Lucidity." I liked it as an overall work. I have a suggestion, that you go with the spiritual medicine, and spiritual journey, with the twist of the dark ages thrown in due to the tourtue he's put himself through. You never finished with the "Computer Program," scenerio so to change it would be easy, some of your dialogue is simplistic, (I just... read

The Ferry, a nightmare I hope I never have.

A review of The Ferry

by Unknownwriter9 on 12/18/2011

The Ferry,a nightmare I hope I neve have. I loved the twist ending, of how the whole day was just a last memory. It reminded me of a story I seen on film of a civil war P.O.W. being hanged, and it was a last thought kind of story. It was very well done, and had now misspelled words that I found, the format was good, and as I mentioned the conecept was great. I enjoyed this... read

Shrowded in mystery, this screenplay depicts one womans insight.

A review of Croatoa

by Unknownwriter9 on 12/15/2011

Croatoa, was an excellent concept for a screenplay. I had no problem reading or beliving the characters dialogue in this historical drama. I did have one concern: Towards the end, why is the native boy taken? what happens to him, it's really left open. AND how did the Governor get such detailed info, sleeping arrangements, father's fishing schedule, mother's schedule... read

"The Short-Cut"

A review of What America Has To Offer

by Unknownwriter9 on 12/14/2011

I loved your story, it brought back, a found memory of my dad's "Human-side," in looking to save time by taking a back road one christmas morning. An early morning dash (supposed to be a family caravan)from my grand-parents house to my aunt and uncle's house about fifty-miles away. We still refer to it as, "The Short-Cut," not only was it not a short-cut but we arrived mid... read

Who Am I kidding?

A review of Who Are You Kidding?

by Unknownwriter9 on 12/11/2011

Just having reach 41yrs and all those sayings of my Grandmother, of, "eat what you can while you can, 'cause when you get older your metoblisim will change," I am. I love food, and can Identify with having the "Munchies," benge eating, I do it all the time, I like your story and could be some of the things that go through my head, if it weren't for the thoughts of how I can... read

Thugs, a real good read.

A review of Thugs

by Unknownwriter9 on 12/09/2011

I liked thugs, just living up the I-5 my self, and have lived in So-Cal, I could relate to the setting. I found Thugs to be very well dialogued, the reading was gripping at times and I found this a story not to be put down. The "Chase," was exceptional in this screenplay, and only added to the drama of it all. I could really visualize some of the scenes as it were already a... read

Black Molasses, a funny ending, to a great zobie beginning.

A review of Black Molasses

by Unknownwriter9 on 12/06/2011

I would love to read the rest of your potiential zombie story. You have a great imagination, a bit too graphic in some areas I think. (Just my opinion) I think you could stay away from some of the details with out losing direction. I like the concept, and I don't really like horror at all, but I try and read what is given to me as assignments. I love the comedic ending, it... read

Lucifer's first plan, a good read overall.

A review of Lucifer's First Plan

by Unknownwriter9 on 12/06/2011

Lucifer's first plan, was a good read over-all. There were some "house keeping," issues, some spelling, some incomplete or wrong words, House keeping or editing, but over all I enjoyed this take on the "Garden of Eden." I enjoyed this story because of it's biblical fantasy stand-point. It would be a good concept for a monologue for a movie concept I was mildly working on. Mainly... read

The Gospel of Eibhlin, a good read, and great concept.

A review of The Gospels of Eibhlin

by Unknownwriter9 on 11/30/2011

The Gospel of Eibhlin, was a good read, as well as a great concept. The dialogue flowed and so did the story. I found the twist ending with her and her cousin to be fitting of this take off of the Gospels of Christ. I liked the way you gave each of the main characters a "Gospel" of their own, from their stand point of background. I liked it and will probably get my mother to... read

Couldn't get it to run, Sorry

A review of Funtime Frankie

by Unknownwriter9 on 11/21/2011

I could not get your short film, Funtime Frankie, to open. I tried several times. I even downloaded the proppers and such, well good luck guys, I'm Off. Off to see the wizard, you know, that wonderful wizard of oz?If ever there wiz there wuz. The grandest wizard of them all. He had be better than them all, after all the trouble I went to to fill this page up.

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