alanlawless 

member since 04/30/2009 | last login 05/11/2011

Alan Lawless grew up bored and depressed in the suburbs where he drank too much and did too many drugs. He began writing in the eighth grade and hasn't stopped since. He know resides in the NYC metro area....

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Alan Lawless grew up bored and depressed in the suburbs where he drank too much and did too many drugs. He began writing in the eighth grade and hasn't stopped since. He know resides in the NYC metro area.

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Reviews by alanlawless 3

  • A review of Dead End
    by alanlawless on 05/27/2010
    A compact, fast moving and mesmerizing short story. You'll be hooked right from the first sentence and race, along with the main character, all the way thru to find out what exactly she's going through. Very well written, descriptions that flow like music and imagery that you can't help but feel is being painted live before your eyes. My only critique revolves around the line... read
  • A review of A Constant Variable
    by alanlawless on 04/30/2009
    I think that this script is very well paced, moving along quickly, the dialog is good and realistic, the characters are believable and fairly well rounded and over-all I enjoyed reading this script. That beign said, there were a few areas that need work, such as: I feel the repated scenes of Jacob running to Tayah's apartment to get answers about what is going on wear on the... read

Comments About alanlawless 1

  • richbett on 05/27/2010

    Thanks for the review, Alan. I will read through the line in question and think through a revision. The story was originally put together as an idea to help out a friend into making short films, but I later put it to paper designed for a short-short contest of 1500 words or less.

    Regardless, I appreciate the input and will look over revising it. Unfortunately, the posting format here doesn't really allow for revisions on the fly - must re-post the story to make revisions - but if I do submit the thing to one of the contests, I'll have gone over several of the small items in question.

    Off hand, of the more immediate concern is if you considered the "- there was no blood" such a sledge hammer of a clue as to bludgeon the twist before you reached the end.

    Thanks again and good luck!

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