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  vieira4 on 07/22/2012

  Ah, no, I didn't see that look on Mario's face - I was in Malawi. Shame. He's never, ever missed a penalty. Amazing. I'm so glad the game has characters like this.
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  **DELETED ACCOUNT** on 06/22/2012

  Thanks much for the kind review of "Michael's". You sure seem to have gotten the point, re the lonliness, the seediness, the self-destructiveness. As for Mike's dick size, it doesn't change... the narrator rates him a "7" overall! But anyway I like the idea of a continuity error in the piece and if you read it that way it's just fine by me.
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  vieira4 on 06/15/2012

  Hi. Thanks for your review of Devolution, which was brilliant. I was really happy to get a review from someone who really knows who Mario Balotelli is. When i wrote the first edition of this, in January, I was really only just beginning to find out about him and everything he's meant to get up to. I think if I'd written it today, it would be different. Whilst I do think he's a bit crazy, I also think he's 90% decent and gets a bad press. Thanks for all the advice, which I will take on board.

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Comments About asankagurusinghe 11

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  vieira4 on 07/22/2012

  Ah, no, I didn't see that look on Mario's face - I was in Malawi. Shame. He's never, ever missed a penalty. Amazing. I'm so glad the game has characters like this.
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  **DELETED ACCOUNT** on 06/22/2012

  Thanks much for the kind review of "Michael's". You sure seem to have gotten the point, re the lonliness, the seediness, the self-destructiveness. As for Mike's dick size, it doesn't change... the narrator rates him a "7" overall! But anyway I like the idea of a continuity error in the piece and if you read it that way it's just fine by me.
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  vieira4 on 06/15/2012

  Hi. Thanks for your review of Devolution, which was brilliant. I was really happy to get a review from someone who really knows who Mario Balotelli is. When i wrote the first edition of this, in January, I was really only just beginning to find out about him and everything he's meant to get up to. I think if I'd written it today, it would be different. Whilst I do think he's a bit crazy, I also think he's 90% decent and gets a bad press. Thanks for all the advice, which I will take on board.
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  Mike Wolfson on 05/21/2012

  Hi Many thanks for the review of Fantasies. You nailed my reasons for using short sentence structure, and you're the first to do so. I'll look at the woman's dialog at the end of the story to see if I can tighten it up.
  
  Take care,
  
  Mike.
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  f-ceska on 05/19/2012

  Hello and thank you for your review of 'The Gospel of Alfonso', and for being the first to wade through almost 50 pages of it. Your advice is useful and I fair. I will follow your suggestion and change the word 'fakir'. I wasn't aware of its connotations and Eibhlin's character would probably be more in tune with things like that. I'm sure you pulled together some of the connections from having read 'The Gospel of Michael' earlier, though there are two others in the middle so it's quite a jump in the story.
  
  Anyway, I'm a bit in awe of you now, having just read and reviewed one of your stories, and I've also added you to my favourites list.
  
  Thanks again.
  Francesca
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  f-ceska on 04/01/2012

  Thank you for your review of 'The Gospel of Michael'. I'm glad you enjoyed it. That's what makes me happy - making readers happy! As you probably noticed it's one in a series of 'gospels' that tell a longer story, and run from 2028 - 2061. There's also a screenplay of the whole thing!
  
  I hope to come across some of your work soon.
  
  All the best,
  
  Francesca
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  nick74 on 03/26/2012

  Asan
  
  Thanks for taking the time to read Spectrum-Illuminated. Also, thanks for your graceful review. That's why we writers write, right? Much appreciated, my friend.
  
  A tid bit: This story was written when one of our fellow TSers named F-Ceska approached me with a writer's challenge to craft our own unique stories from the same source. So, we each wrote our own interpretations of the song "Spectrum" by Florence and the Machine http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Zz6ri7wVS-Q&feature=related. Our two versions are quite different over all, but what similarities there are, are shocking.
  
  Again, thank you so much for reading and enjoying this work. I look very forward to returning the favor.
  
  Nick
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  vieira4 on 03/21/2012

  Hi. Thanks for your review of 'He Arrived Home'. You understood everything. It was meant to be mysterious at first. I wanted people to not quite know what was going on, but figure it out eventually. I think if I'd started by saying, 'Wojciech Szczesny arrived home the day after Arsenal lost to AC Milan," it wouldn't have been as interesting. Thanks again!
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  mmckean on 03/15/2012

  Thanks for the review of "Agoraphobic." There were a few areas that could have been expanded. Especially the scene where Jack slits his own throat.
  
  Good luck with your own work,
  
  M.L.
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  vieira4 on 03/05/2012

  Hi. Thanks for another review of another part of 13.45. As someone pointed out earlier, not many people seem to be actively reviewing, so you're getting stuck with a lot of my submissions over and over again! Sorry about that! You seem to be enjoying it, which makes me happy. I'm glad that you got Mark's sense of alienation, and why the hearing means so much to me, from what I wrote. This is what I intended, and there's nothing like knowing that you succeeded!
  
  About fleshing the hearing out, 13.45 is actually a companion piece to another story, "How Do You Think Scott Feels?", in which the 'courtroom scene' is relayed in full, from Scott's point of view. I wanted to avoid too much repetition between the two stories, because I'm hoping they're going to be part of the same compendium one day, along with a third story (work in progress). I'll see which bits of the dialogue I can make surplus to requirements. Thanks again for all your hard work!
  
  Btw, I did wonder, from your previous review, why you thought Mark was 12. I now realise that this is because i got his date of birth wrong. That story has been on the site for AGES, and I've only just figured it out... It's supposed to be 5/11/1998, not '99 :D

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