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A WORTHY READ

A review of Father Max Rev. 2

by ashquadir on 09/26/2006

This is one of the better scripts on the sight, with only a few small complaints. The descriptions/actions were a little wordy at times and it sometimes read like a novel. However, as the script progressed, descriptions became more succinct. The characters are for the most part well-defined. Francis was perhaps the most intriguing and interesting character -- sometimes... read

A FUN RIDE!

A review of Self Help

by ashquadir on 09/19/2006

Apart from several grammar issues and spelling mistakes, this is a well written script. (e.g. on page 60, it should be Brenda putting her hands on Stanley’s knee – not Felecia.) The dialogue was very good and despite the large number of characters, most had distinct personalities that were identifiable. At times, the dialogue was quite funny. Work on punching up the comedy... read

SOLID - BUT A LITTLE LESS BLOOD AND GUTS

A review of Unholy

by ashquadir on 03/22/2006

This is a well written screenplay and the dialogue is spot on. The story moves along at a fast clip, with little pause for introspection. I enjoyed the overall story, however, the first half of the screenplay was a very promising story that gave me indications that this story would be different from the countless Hollywood horror films churned out; but I was a little sad... read

A SOLID SCREENPLAY

A review of The Innocence of Ruth

by ashquadir on 03/16/2006

This is a well-written screenplay. The dialogue is appropriate and authentic sounding for the time period. The script was written succinctly without padding. It paints a picture without bogging down on descriptions which helps the pace and moves along at a fast clip. The main characters are also well-defined. Packer comes out as very sinister and Ruth elicits sympathy... read

IMAGINATION RUN AMOK - GREAT!

A review of The Maitland Exhibit

by ashquadir on 02/17/2003

After reading so many mediocre screenplays on this site, it was refreshing to read something so good. The screenplay was immediatley interesting and increasingly engrossing - the pages were flipped quickly. Maitland's world was fully realized and vividly described. Nova and Enigma were great characters, well drawn and interesting. The dialogue was sharp and quite intelligent... read

A VERY "UNRIPE "SCRIPT

A review of TANGERINE

by ashquadir on 02/12/2003

This should be a spec script and not a shooting script! There is WAY TOO MANY camera directions (leave this up to the director) and WAY TOO MUCH details and description about what the characters are wearing or doing. This is a screenplay and not a novel. Leave it to the readerâ€™s imagination to fill in the details about a scene or location rather than explicitly detailing... read

SHOWS EARLY PROMISE THEN SINKS

A review of Thy Neighbor's Wife

by ashquadir on 12/03/2002

There is a sense of brooding atmosphere from the get go, but the screenplay becomes increasingly depressing - this is mainly attributed to the characters, who are mostly pathetic. Initially, you root for Beth, but she hardly takes 'matters in to her own hand' until the end - and then barely. Although you sympathize with her initially, the fact that she's stupid enough to... read

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