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A review of The Narrative of Arthur Gordon Pym (REV1)

by benztown on 05/14/2008

First off, I never read the tale of Arthur Gordon Pym so I'm not able take that into consideration for the feedback. Now, I greatly enjoyed your script. It transitions smooth from scene to scene. There are a few typos, grammar and formatting issues but nothing major. I was sucked into the story within the first few pages. Nicely done. And I had to read it in one sitting because... read

Time's Fool

A review of Time's Fool

by benztown on 05/12/2008

Excellent format and grammar. Clean, short visual descriptions. The dialogue is also very well written, however, sometimes it seemed a bit too witty for demented Elise. All in all it's a well-crafted script. Now to the actual story. I had a hard time connecting with any of the characters and I think it was because I was missing conflict. I know your script is full of conflict... read

Great!!!

A review of The Untitled Work of Paul Shepard (2008)

by benztown on 04/08/2008

This will be by far the shortest review I have ever written -- but I have not much to say except: what a great script! Each character was well developed. The story is tight, visually written and a pleasure to read. And the dialogue...I can't say enough good things about the dialogue. Very natural and distinct to each character and not overdone. I think the concept is very... read

If not for you

A review of IF NOT FOR YOU - final version

by benztown on 03/31/2008

Except for a few minor typos this is a very clean script. And by clean I mean well written. It was a very easy read - thank you! I like the characters, the descriptions were visual and to the point and the dialogue fits the characters well. I see where this critique is going: I don't have all that much to say. There is only one thing I would critique: The story was falling... read

My brothers keeper

A review of My Brothers Keeper (v.4)

by benztown on 11/26/2007

This script is a very easy and quick read due to the excellent formatting and presentation. The story is told well from line one to the end. After finishing reading the script I was left wondering what happened to Cordelia? The beginning is such a great set-up...I was hoping Michael would return and finally be with his love. It felt like this would be a great love story..... read

The Beloved

A review of The Beloved

by benztown on 10/23/2007

It was a pleasure to read this script. Written very clear and efficient. Set up works very well, the car accident and following accident takes the reader right into the story. The reader instantly connects with Ethan and feels sympathy for him. The concept of the ambitious, restless laywer that has never lost a case and gets recruited by the biggest oil company (which turns... read

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