Brian W

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A review of The Concise Biography of the Manticore

by Brian W on 09/29/2007

nice use of an allegory, an animal that is completely unique to describe the life of an art student, after art school. Even though the piece takes on the fictitious manticore as its hero, there is an open eyed clarity to it, a sincerity that probably rests in the biographical. Would have preferred a more straight-forward story, something about the Manticore doing something,... read

insane, funny-

A review of The Down and Out Diner

by Brian W on 09/27/2007

some other key descriptors are necessary here but they escape me at the moment. I would prefer you didn't start the story telling me it's a dream. Maybe don't do a reveal at the end either. It's absurd and fun. Really separate dialogue and paragraph better. It hurts my eyes done the way you did it. Just make it look better and they will come. Fun-weird-pretty good. I've... read

Interesting monster-

A review of The Vegetarian

by Brian W on 09/27/2007

-but not the way to tell his story. I fear that you may want to go back and really revise the character, because to the casual reader, the reveal does not make much sense. We cannot infer clues of who he is, and there is so much left hanging that we cannot fully understand what he is. I'm interested in what makes a man do this, but his walking through desert thing doesn't... read

I'm wondering if Harry is HR

A review of Candlestick

by Brian W on 09/24/2007

This comes off as a personal sort of story. Like you are writing about your own father. So there's sincerity there. If this is your story, then I find it very hard to give you kind of constructive criticism I would give to a piece of fiction. I'm going to hope, and move on with what bothered me. Formatting was weak. Really try your best to break off those paragraphs. Three... read

Yikes.

A review of Walking Through Fields With Strangers

by Brian W on 09/24/2007

I have to say, I liked the piece. I did feel that the early part, your exposition can be greatly reduced. While you have fun with the words, it does detract from the narrative structure and, I believe, your over-all meaning. That said, I also think you are best when you do not let yourself get carried away with your elaborate run-ons. As fun as they are, the casual audience... read

Interesting work...

A review of Forward: Divinity in a Donut

by Brian W on 09/22/2007

I really did enjoy this piece. Though I am much more a fan of straight-forward prose pieces, I can get into the avant-garde every once in a while. I liked the two levels you worked on, making religion and sex both interchangeable. Which is a theme that permeates a lot of my work. Was it supposed to be "bout" instead of "bought"? One makes sense, the other doesn't. It... read

Interesting...

A review of Swirl

by Brian W on 09/20/2007

I'm a lot confused by this piece, one which you mark as Sci-Fi. I can't see why. It's more like a strange dream than a proper sci-fi story. Some of the dialogue was pretty good, reminded my a lot of an Avant Garde theater performance. But, I have to say it was a pretty confusing piece. That's not to say it went over my head, but the language within, the tenses you used,... read

Pretty Good.

A review of A Dangerous Mind

by Brian W on 09/20/2007

You certainly went out of your way to turn the table on your audience in that last bit. I only have a few things to say. The bit about the Dictator they fought against, all of that is sort of unnecessary. It confuses the reader. I don't know what you would put in its place though. Pretty solid structure for the story. The only writing criticisms I would be concerned about... read

High Seas Tension!

A review of Deathwatch (latest)

by Brian W on 10/20/2006

I enjoyed the pirate film you've both crafted. It is interesting to see a more adult look on the Pirate life. There was some intrigue here, but my only problem with what is ostensibly a very tight script were the leaps of logic I had to take several times. When working with suspense/mystery, logic sometimes has to take a back seat to get that shock. The Chests of Gold that... read

Great Descent

A review of You Were the First One

by Brian W on 10/20/2006

At this point, anything I say would be superfluous. You seem like a writer that understands the complexities of sexual obsession. The start is slow, I'll admit, painting the characters in, but once the fateful night begins, the descent is logical and horrible and it all feels right. The only part I would consider again is the film on the giant skull. The pacing is interrupted... read

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