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A review of Nice Boy

by Coxatron on 12/05/2010

Nice Boy was a very entertaining read with an ending that came out of nowhere. Smoothly written and executed well, Nice Boy is solid from beginning to end and is a must-read. The story has a nice structure that is very easy to follow along with. Settings, characters and actions are detailed well and really hook the reader. Dialogue is great and the characters are easy to... read

Saladin Haze Packs A Punch

A review of Saladin Haze

by Coxatron on 12/02/2010

Saladin Haze was enthralling from the start and never let up. Following Saladin's adventures across a war-torn nation provided a very good look into what that type of situation would present. The title character was gritty and violent, but appeared to have shreds of civility and care left underneath his rough exterior. This provided several instances where it looked as if... read

Lost In a Field

A review of In a Field

by Coxatron on 12/01/2010

I don't really know what I read. The synopsis told me that the story revolved around a detective "in a field", but the story didn't tell me why. The entire piece seemed to revolve around the detective wandering around aimlessly for no reason. This didn't necessarily have to pose a significant hurdle for the reader, but there really wasn't anything interesting to read. It... read

Annotated Edition Review

A review of Annotated Edition

by Coxatron on 11/30/2010

I have to say this was quite a peculiar way of writing. From the very beginning, between the introductory notes and the mention of an alter ego, I was very interested in the story's content. As I began reading I began to wonder why there was such an abundance of metaphors. When the characters began to discuss the massive amounts of metaphors, it produced a slight chuckle... I have to say this was quite a peculiar way of writing.

From the very beginning, between the introductory notes and the mention of an alter ego, I was very interested in the story's content. As I began reading I began to wonder why there was such an abundance of metaphors. When the characters began to discuss the massive amounts of metaphors, it produced a slight chuckle but it was pretty tiring to read. The metaphor usage was heavy from the start and the payoff of the punchline (where the usage of metaphors is discussed) didn't feel completely worth it.

I did enjoy how the narrator's perspective changed during the course of the story. It added a very good opportunity to explore each character's mindset, but I feel like each section was a little too short to take advantage of that. Possibly expanding upon each character and the time they have the "spotlight" could improve this piece in a lot of ways.

Humor might not have come across as intended. The dick joke was unexpected and funny only because I didn't expect a penis to walk through the door, but there really didn't seem to be a purpose relevant to the story. Story elements seemed to be nonexistent. I was aware of what I was reading, but I didn't know why I was reading it.

Characters could use a little more fleshing out. There didn't seem to be a connection to be had between the characters and the reader, something I usually find to be very important. It really felt like I was being ushered from punchline to punchline without any sense of story. That would have been fine if the humor had more of an impact while reading. As it stands, however, it comes across as random and out of place.

In all honesty I feel like this would make a better comic strip. The flow of the dialogue and story was very reminiscent of a comic, but portraying it as a short story detracts from the effect a lot of the material could have. It wasn't awful to read, but it didn't reach out and grab my attention all the way through until the finish. It felt a bit flat. read

7th Daybreak - Chapter 4 Review

A review of 7th Daybreak - Chapter 4

by Coxatron on 11/29/2010

It was a little difficult to follow the story because I was assigned Chapter 4. Had I been able to read the previous chapters beforehand, my understanding and connection with the characters would have been greater and the story would have been easier to follow. Based on this, I will simply try to explain how the presentation and flow of the chapter came across. Almost immediately... read

Babel It Is Not

A review of Dr. Tower's Babel

by Coxatron on 11/28/2010

This is one of the most interesting and stimulating short stories that I can recall ever reading. As an individual with a piqued interest in astronomy and everything related to the stars, the basic subject matter of the story drew me in right away. The quote in the introduction was a nice touch and I felt like I was in for an intelligent, enlightened read. Right from the... read

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