Sometimes the best way back is a detour
From the age of 16 months until 6 years old, I lived on the grounds of a state mental hospital in Harrisburg, Pa. My father, a German/Jewish psychiatrist and refugee from Nazi Germany, was the clinical director at the hospital. I played...
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From the age of 16 months until 6 years old, I lived on the grounds of a state mental hospital in Harrisburg, Pa. My father, a German/Jewish psychiatrist and refugee from Nazi Germany, was the clinical director at the hospital. I played in the sprawling fields, hills and gullies. We got our food for free from the hospital grocery. We ate steak almost every night. I was happy there. One day I hope to return to a place just like it. I think I'm well on my way.
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A review of The Uglyby David Muhlfelder on 05/14/2013I have mixed feelings about this script. I liked the characters, especially the dynamic between Frank, Agnes and George King. I did care about what happened to these people. But I had a hard time seeing this story on the screen. Structurally, this felt more like an outline for a novel rather than a film. By that I mean it felt like the highlights of a larger, more detailed... read
A review of The Angeleno (r)by David Muhlfelder on 04/30/2013Jose, thank you for one of the smoothest and easiest reads I've had in quite some time. The pacing and flow was excellent. The world you created was vivid and easy to visualize. And the characters who populated it, especially Brogan and Capella, were distinctive and real. The dialogue read very natural, and avoided being on the nose or overly expository. The story was nothing... read
A review of Wolfby David Muhlfelder on 04/23/2013When I saw the dense blocks of descriptive text, I thought about deleting this assignment, but I decided to give it a go. I should've gone with my initial instincts. I'm sure you've heard this from other reviewers, but it bears repeating. You need to condense these long blocks of description into two or three lines tops. They need to be written in active voice. Don't begin... read