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Suffers from what all movies about Jesus suffer from

A review of The Scribe 2nd draft

by dmw256 on 05/07/2013

I will start off by saying that I am a fan of religious fiction - whether it be contemporary supernatural thrillers, apocalyptic films, or retellings of old biblical tales in a new and unfamiliar setting. So, if you're film was made, I would probably go see it. But with that said, your film suffers from what ails all films with Jesus as a character - he is detached and is hard... read

Love Story

A review of The Torch

by dmw256 on 05/01/2013

My first question: Is paddy wagon a term still used today? I liked this story. I was not blown away by it, but I feel it has potential - possibly somewhere in between Fantastic Four and Iron Man 3. The set-up was good. I liked that these two kids had superpowers. I don't know if this was intended, or if others experienced this, but I felt that there, for most of the script,... read

On the nose

A review of Moving

by dmw256 on 04/29/2013

This script suffers from too much on the nose dialogue. I may know of one person that just constantly talks like your characters, but your script is filled with them and it doesn't ring true or natural. The characters are constantly talking and expressing their feelings. There is no silence - and in film (especially in a story that you're attempting to tackle) - silence can... read

A unique world

A review of Pachelbel

by dmw256 on 04/29/2013

As my title suggests, you go to great lengths to create a unique and vibrant world for your characters to move about. And there lies my biggest problem with this script, you waste so many pages creating this world -- some are necessary, others are not. It was the issues I had with the early Harry Potter films. One of the earliest problems is when the protagonists follow the... read

The Angeleno

A review of The Angeleno (r)

by dmw256 on 04/24/2013

Okay... So my biggest issue with this (and sorry if this seems harsh) but there's nothing new here. It's seems to be a whittled down version of numerous movies I've seen from the 80's. I was just talking to my friend the other day and said that those are great movies to replicate. But this is a bad guy that's really good, who wants to do right by a girl and her son. It even... read

Lost Interest

A review of The Devil's Lighthouse

by dmw256 on 04/23/2013

Rarely (I'm sure) is there 3 interesting choices in my queue, but at the time I chose yours, I did. It seemed the most interesting, but for one I just recently finished, this one, I feel, didn't deliver on its promises. Now, that's not to say that you don't have a good story about a family coming apart at the seems because I definitely see that, especially in the early scenes... read

A Good Thriller

A review of The Campaign

by dmw256 on 04/19/2013

I really enjoyed your script. It was a taunt, exciting thriller and I could definitely see this in a theater someday, which makes it difficult for me to review. Temple was a strong lead. I could see any number of black actors play him. The only character I had issue with was Caldwell. One, and maybe I missed the build up of it, but when Caldwell says he was planning to step... read

Authentic Dialogue

A review of The Ugly

by dmw256 on 04/14/2013

The first thing I noticed about this script was how real the people sounded. I felt I was talking with an accent the whole time I was reading the script. It did, however, begin to wear on me as I got further and further into the script. I noticed (and this may not be the case, just my perception) in the last third, it seemed to lessen. For me, this script moved slow. I was... read

It was good.

A review of Willie12

by dmw256 on 12/05/2012

I really enjoyed this. It kept me intrigued. It's been the only slasher/horror script on this site where I wanted to jump ahead and find out who the killer is. It was a quick read, written. There really isn't anything new in this script, which is probably it's biggest flaw, but then again, what horror film good or bad has anything new in it. That's why people watch these... read

A germ of an idea.

A review of Blood Dreams

by dmw256 on 11/15/2012

I think you have an idea hidden in this script that you failed to really explore and that is the idea of a man passing from body to body through time. Like how does that affect the individual? Beyond a blood lust, how does this person view the world differently than everyone else? You could've created a deep mythology and really explored this character and I think you should... read

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