Artie Lang goes back home to find out what his father left him. In the process, he's confronted with the daughter... more
Okay, so I'm still learning how to write. But hopefully I've gotten better than my first attempt, Artie Lang. Still working on that one, by the way. As I said I'm learning, so please remember that when you're reviewing. But at the...
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Okay, so I'm still learning how to write. But hopefully I've gotten better than my first attempt, Artie Lang. Still working on that one, by the way. As I said I'm learning, so please remember that when you're reviewing. But at the same time tell me like it is. Hopefully that makes sense.
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Reviews by E. Jennings 20
A review of Hollywood Soldiers (Revised)by E. Jennings on 02/01/2008I loved your screenplay. I think that you have a great idea and a great script. I can see this becoming a film very soon. There's really not to much to give you advice on except may be add a little more background on Del. We first meet him in his house and he seems relatively sane. Then all of a sudden he goes into crazy man mode. I understand his friend died, but I would just... read
A review of A Constant Variableby E. Jennings on 01/29/2008You kept me hooked from the get go. I really enjoyed your screenplay, even though it had really sad moments to it. You played with emotions very well. The characters are strong and well thought out. Your plot was interesting. I only have a few things to suggest. Things To Consider: 1) Talk about Olive a bit more. Incorporate her into the story. Her character is fantastic... read
A review of COLONY Xby E. Jennings on 01/28/2008It's not the type of movie I would want to go see. However, it was very well written. Your characters were strong and dialogue was good. The structure was nice as was the story. There are only a few things I would suggest. 1) Watch your grammar. There were a few sentences that had the wrong tense. 2) You have quite a few run-on sentences. Seperate them. 3) I would add a bit... read