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A review of 1066

by hrickclark on 04/15/2005

The script feels like it was well researched giving it a feel of authenticity. There is a basic flaw in the script however, the format for a spec screenplay is wrong. That may seem like a petty complaint but it's wrong enough to keep it from being read by a reader. Don't try to put camera shots or angles in a script. My opinion is that Movie Magic or ScriptWriter should... read

CHIHUAHUA DOGGONE

A review of Chihuahua Popcorn

by hrickclark on 02/08/2005

It's hard to review a working draft because it's hard to tell which way the writer is trying to take the story. To me it was short of being a comedy and past being drama. If it's meant to be comedy use some comedy scenes, for example; in a supermarket where there's a fight I could see the floor covered in anything and everything that's breakable. The lottery ticket could... read

OBVIOUSLY LIKES BASEBALL

A review of Omaha

by hrickclark on 02/07/2005

Omaha is a feel good story with some minor flaws. The worst is spelling and having so many words and sentences underlined with green and red lines. I got the feeling the script was not double checked as suggested by the instructions. The baseball game reads like a real game, however baseball is inheritly slow so the script needs to tighten it up a bit. I think the concept... read

CARTOON

A review of The Bubble

by hrickclark on 02/04/2005

My first thought about this script was that with a little doctoring it would make a good childrens cartoon. I think it is well written and certainly thought out. The plot is fairly easy to follow as it unfolds slow enough to follow. A happy ending wraps the whole thing up in a neat package. Lots of luck...Rick

FOCUSED AND TIGHT

A review of Vivid Gray

by hrickclark on 02/02/2005

This script started off with a story and didn't veer from it at all. Every word advanced the story. The dialouge was concise and to the point. If I wanted to find a weakness it might be in the characters. I had trouble relating to them. They didn't see to feel real. However, that is something that is easily fixed with some unusual flaws or movements. Bottom line is I... read

GREAT WESTERN

A review of Grips

by hrickclark on 01/30/2005

A problem I have with almost anything is the more I like it the more glaring the (perceived) mistakes. On several occasions what someone should of said was placed in the description of the scence. The most glaring was when Mama is said to know a lot more about Skats. This script was not about Skats, any important parts for him started on page 90, 90 minutes into the play... read

FEEL GOOD MOVIE

A review of Always A Bridesmaid

by hrickclark on 01/30/2005

ALWAYS A BRIDESMAID is a feel good movie. From beginning to end it seems to plod along to it's logical conclusion. I would have liked to have seen a little more drama in there somewhere. Conflicts that arn't solveable in a couple of pages. Some kind of underlying problem that plagued the bridesmaid. I hope you have lots of luck with your first project...Rick

A LITTLE SHORT OF JOY

A review of JOY

by hrickclark on 01/29/2005

The start of the screenplay had my intention from the start but it was in a negative way. I don't like profanity in quanity in front of children. Other than that it was a legimate opening that had some quality but it didn't hook me to keep going. It took a long time for me to catch up to what was actually happening but that might have been my fault being older than some... read

GREAT WAR SCENES

A review of Four Horsemen (rev 2)

by hrickclark on 01/24/2005

This script had some great battle scenes. The concept of family is an old but still fresh when well written. I'm afraid I didn't find that part of the script as well thought out as the battle scenes. Another problem I had was a lack of interest until the war started, which was almost an hour into the script. I thought the where "the plot thickens" which should come around... read

NEEDS WORK

A review of Fishsticks

by hrickclark on 01/21/2005

I hate to give a bad review for any script. I know that even on “weak” scripts many hours and tons of dreams and hopes are poured into the project.Whenever a writer produces a book or screenplay they must realize that formulas are involved. I believe the author of FISHSTICKS either doesn’t know about the formulas or ignored them completely. I didn’t really know what... read

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