HRoberts 

member since 01/13/2004 | last login 01/23/2005

I'm a graduate student and university instructor, bicyclist, photographer, book artist, and aspiring screenwriter. I enjoy reading TS material, it's a break from the dry academic writing I usually have to read. I worked several years as a writer and editor before...

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I'm a graduate student and university instructor, bicyclist, photographer, book artist, and aspiring screenwriter. I enjoy reading TS material, it's a break from the dry academic writing I usually have to read. I worked several years as a writer and editor before returning to school. Thank you for letting me read your work. I hope any review I give you is helpful.

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Reviews by HRoberts 26

  • A review of The Fools On the Bus
    by HRoberts on 06/08/2004
    There is potential here, you created a zany situation and kept the action moving. However, there are a couple things I think you need to work on. First, Bobby needs to be a more sympathetic character with more at stake. He's a 23-year-old who still lives at home and doesn't work--okay, why should I root for him? He wants his car back, but why? There's no indication of him needing... read
  • A review of Retail
    by HRoberts on 04/22/2004
    This is a dark and cynical look at humanity, the only nice people in the script are babies. It's a great situation but there's no one to root for: the customers are rude and manipulative, the employees are rude and obstructive, and the hero is so passive that a shaman has to point him in the direction of a job, give him a magic drink, and ensure that a fairy alerts him to a... read
  • A review of Highs and Laws
    by HRoberts on 04/21/2004
    I had a writing teacher once who would ask two questions about every piece we read: "what's it about?" and then, "what's it really about?" The point being that underneath the story there's a theme that is larger than the story itself. With this SP, I had trouble saying what the story is, and as for theme, there's not one. John heads off to Pago Pago and all this stuff happens... read
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