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Flood of Tears

A review of FLOOD OF TEARS

by jackcasey on 10/30/2011

Outstanding. This was a great read. While the event is so current in our lives, its telling brings to mind, Titanic. I mean that in only the most positive ways. I often wondered how somebody could make a movie where everyone already knows the ending, yet keeps us hanging on to the last scene. You have done it and done it well which makes my job difficult. Your characters... Outstanding. This was a great read. While the event is so current in our lives, its telling brings to mind, Titanic. I mean that in only the most positive ways. I often wondered how somebody could make a movie where everyone already knows the ending, yet keeps us hanging on to the last scene. You have done it and done it well which makes my job difficult. Your characters were excellent and your pacing was terrific. If I could suggest anything it would be to bring life at the Patong Hotel in to your story earlier. Having the opportunity to familiarize ourselves with the people and their culture I think could strengthen the impact this horrible event had on their way of life. When Harry looks up and notices the sea was out of sight it seemed like a lost chance to raise the bar because it was not in relation to any other descriptions of how the sea normally looked. I would have liked the slightest of clues to have shown us things were not right, it would add to the suspense. The surfers were excellent but there had to be others that also noticed not all was well. Steve tells us he was sucked down while diving, it would have been more effective if you had shown us that instead and how bout the reaction of the captain chartering his diving boat, surely he would have notice something was amiss. Anyway I find the whole phenomenon to be fascinating and would have loved to see show it develops in greater detail. When the tsunami hits your descriptions were fantastic. I felt like I was there and simply reading about it has given me a different perspective on the power of such a force of nature. You did such a wonderful job of developing Sumalee's character I was more attached to her than Kate and found myself wishing you would have shown us that she too was going to be alright in the end. Maybe a glimpse of life going on in that part of the world would have given some closure. Overall great story, it was a pleasure to read. Best of luck.

Just a couple of small points
Kate's epiphany in the cemetery was a little foggy for me. I wasn't totally sure what set her off in search of Harry other than realizing that he also cared about Beth. I guess she connected the dots after being told he visited the cemetery regularly.

It might be me, but I wasn't exactly sure who the baby was being named after. I'm assuming Sumalee. Too cryptic?

Page 18 - I think you meant to have John say the following not Will.
Don't go there, Harry. It's all
in the past. No ones fault.
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I am Alien

A review of I am Alien

by jackcasey on 02/15/2011

Having the earth freeze over is a great premise and as an inhabitant it grabbed my attention right from the start. Longo and Kelly pursuing the bus and the ensuing crash got the story moving right away. Your pacing was excellent. Jumping to the ending simply because it was the only part that disappointed me I would have preferred civilization be saved by something other then... read

Great read

A review of Rocket '78

by jackcasey on 06/10/2010

You've written a great story. I don't spend much time on the site anymore and certainly wasn't planning to write a review today. I'm not sure I've ever written a free will review but felt your story was so good it would have been rude not to tell you. I would put it right up there with PURE with the only difference being Rocket 78 would probably appeal to a wider audience... read

Frat Boys makes Dean's list

A review of Frat Boys from Outer Space

by jackcasey on 05/13/2009

This was an entertaining read. Excellent characters and great imagination went into this tale, creating a world as real as our very own. This intergalatic road trip moves nicely with strong comedic dialougue making it very easy to buy into the whole premise. Although some of the plot tended at times to run very close to Animal House and Nerds the comedy your characters brought... read

The Slow & the Sloppy

A review of The Slow and the Sloppy

by jackcasey on 05/10/2009

I liked your premise of doing a parody of Back to The Future , Fast & the Furious and others as it lends itself to some good comedy. You’ve come up with lots of funny, clever bits but for me you over did the “fart” and “fish” gags. A great example of not over doing a bit was when Miya cleans and gaps the spark plug. You did it then moved on. We never had a chance to get... read

Cocked, Loaded & Good

A review of Cocked & Loaded

by jackcasey on 05/09/2009

Clive, our lead has got some anger management issues. He's about as dysfunctional as they come and completely entertaining. His short fuse keeps us on edge as we quickly learn anything goes once it's lit. There's always enough badness in the people who cross Clive's path that we take pleasure watching them get what they probably deserved anyway. Well, maybe not the old man... read

Pony Express

A review of Pony Express

by jackcasey on 04/21/2009

I like westerns and this one was no disappointment. The premise is surprisingly original given the iconic nature of the Pony Express. I don't recall another story being written about the early business of transporting mail by pony across the western plains. The characters are alive and easy to care about and the pacing introduces them in fine fashion. Johnny, an expert... read

Satan's Gone

A review of SATAN'S GONE (REV 2)

by jackcasey on 04/20/2009

Satan crosses the big guy and ends up getting a taste of what it's like to be a mere mortal. His infinite knowledge of all the evil ever wrought by mankind serves him as a formidable blackmailing tool. This devil isn't such a dis-likable character as he tends to dole out his punishment to those we'd like to see receive it. In that vain I found him to be more of an avenger... read

And the rain was good

A review of AGAIN COMES THE RAIN

by jackcasey on 04/15/2009

Johnny Rain gets a second chance to turn a wasted life into something positive. He doesn't blow the opportunity and watching him get it right turns out to be pretty entertaining thanks to this author's sense of humor. The protagonist is an excellent character who remains believable as he under goes a complete transformation from a self centered, no moral, dirty cop to a guy... read

Trophy

A review of Trophy Taker (Rewrite3)

by jackcasey on 03/28/2009

This was a fun read. I was on board from the get go. The premise is fresh, original, and really creepy. The characters are well developed and engaging which made this a page turner. T.T‘s unique waist band alone makes this psychopath a memorable all star bad guy. I felt real empathy for Julie, with a first rate prick of a father being the least of her problems. You...
This was a fun read. I was on board from the get go. The premise is fresh, original, and really creepy. The characters are well developed and engaging which made this a page turner. T.T‘s unique waist band alone makes this psychopath a memorable all star bad guy. I felt real empathy for Julie, with a first rate prick of a father being the least of her problems. You quickly establish the dynamic between those two. I breathed a sigh of relief when Kurt showed up as Julie was about to get into his van. Great stuff.

What didn’t work as well for this reader was the victim’s spirits talking to Julie after she regained consciousness in the pit. I was hoping she was simply hallucinating, given the horror of her predicament. T.T was far more frightening when I thought he was a real life human inhabiting the same world as me. Somehow the spirits talking released the grip he had on me as I saw him as less threatening and more science fiction. His nasty quirky, grotesque qualities which had me buying him lock stock & barrel were slowly upstaged by the supernatural world. As he seemed to morph into an indestructible super villain toward the end I found the terror meter continued to drop as I was less and less able to relate. I was almost relieved which is a testament to what a bad ass this guy was early on. In later scenes he becomes more terminator, less twisted deranged misanthrope, making him more one dimensional in contrast to his doggy loving, hand chopping earlier scenes. His victims coming back from the dead in the cemetery to finish him off really lost me as this terrific character was finally no longer anything from this world. I began to wonder if perhaps Julie wasn’t once again only dreaming. It might be I’m just not a big scifi fan because it’s clear this author can really write. The pacing was outstanding and it never dragged even though it went in a direction that would not have been my choice. Overall this story is a credit to the genre and T.T deserves to comeback and update his belt. read

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