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A review of The Five Towns

by jgravitch on 01/04/2005

The ellipses...were overused. It seems like they were intended to simulate seamless cutting, but they made your directed paragraphs less so - writing it out and doing it with syntax would be more effective. Dialogue - too much 'telling'. You should let your dramatic situations do more of the talking, all of the expostulation, and overall the dialogue needs to be boiled down... read

Highly competent tale of survival

A review of THE LAST VIKINGS

by jgravitch on 12/27/2004

This was a very competent script. The characters were well drawn and there was a real economy to the storyline that I appreciated. The craftmanship shown here is impeccable, and the only criticism I can offer is that it was so clinical in style that it seems like it was written via a checklist (which isn't necessarily a bad thing when it comes to this genre). It makes me think... read

Excellent naturalism in the storytelling

A review of The Way it Was

by jgravitch on 08/13/2004

This was a nice little story. The major criticism – it was hard to tell the characters apart for a good deal of the script. There didn’t seem to be enough idiosyncratic mannerisms or difference in dialogue to tell them apart (even for Corey and her younger sister where it was hard to ‘hear’ the age difference between them). I began to be able to differentiate them using... read

Four Horsemen

A review of Four Horsemen (revised)

by jgravitch on 08/05/2004

From the start this script struck me for its spry and lively style. The characterizations were well drawn and I liked the story development leading up to the war. There were some nice moments during the transition - the contrast of Julio's lightness to the building weight and horror around him, and the moment in the trenches when Julio remembers the tango music in Paris - to... read

A historical epic that gets it right.

A review of Hannibal

by jgravitch on 07/21/2004

Having read this, all I can say is there’s a reason this script is in the top 10. This is definitely an achievement in screenwriting. I would love to know how long it took to write and what the research process was like. The narrative voice is assured and compelling and the handling of time and all the players involved is admirable. I love history and part of what kept me... read

Not sure about Sentinel Mountain

A review of Sentinel Mountain

by jgravitch on 07/21/2004

I didn’t really like Sentinel Mountain, I wasn’t sure what it was supposed to be about. I got the whole part about there being things in this world we know nothing of and in a way the lives of human beings are still subject to the laws of nature – however bewildering they may be sometimes. But you had a whole lot going on – the relationship between Wyatt and Sam and... read

Mile 111 a bit flat

A review of Mile 111 (Revised 7/04)

by jgravitch on 07/15/2004

Overall I thought it was a decent screenplay, but the characterizations and the dramatic situations were a little bit flat. I felt very little additional insight into the subject at hand. While the story demonstrated well some of the emotions fueling Islamic fundamentalism, it seems to me like a large part of that idea has been left out. The handlers came across as cold, somewhat... read

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