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Off Book Review

A review of Off Book

by K Jones on 10/16/2011

This was an enjoyable light read with lots of potential. It seems quite original to do a funky modern comedy set in the world of the theatre (rather than film which would have been too much of an in-joke). I enjoyed the first third, as I felt I was with Michael’s experience. He and Rick are likeable losers. The plan to write the play also made sense. You want them to succeed... This was an enjoyable light read with lots of potential. It seems quite original to do a funky modern comedy set in the world of the theatre (rather than film which would have been too much of an in-joke).

I enjoyed the first third, as I felt I was with Michael’s experience. He and Rick are likeable losers. The plan to write the play also made sense. You want them to succeed.

I felt it worked less well when we start seeing Vincent’s behind the scenes scheming. Everything became very plotty and Vincent is obviously the bad guy from the start. Vincent wants to ruin the press conference, but surely he’s just given a load of free publicity to the play? Controversy usually sells. He may have been better off trying to subtlety undermine Michael’s relationship with the actors and expose him as a bad director. Also, once he’s been discovered, he continues to take photos. I know plot- wise, it’s because he needs to find Rick. I just thought there might be a different way for him to arrive at Michael’s place.

Ending with the play in the park is definitely the way to go. It’s perfect for the funky modern setting you’ve got. It does lead me to my biggest issue. There is very little sense of Michael actually directing the play in the narrative. We don’t see him directing the actors, working on the lines. Without these, we do not see the bond develop between the characters. We don’t know if Amy is a good actress, or even if the play is any good. Most importantly, we don’t know if Michael is any good as a director. He seems to have some outlandish man-management skills, but I’m not sure if he’s a genius or a lucky fool. Even with the final play in the park, there isn’t one actual “scene” from the play. For a film about making a play, this seems strange.

I really enjoyed the little details and funny lines . I genuinely wondered how you were going to get Amy on the stage at the end and make it satisfying that she’s been to prison. The GPS gag was great.
Thanks for the read. Good luck. read

Beam me up

A review of Puzzle Man V4

by K Jones on 12/06/2008

At the heart of this script is quite an outlandish narrative concept. You either go with it, or you don’t. I did, just about, because the script didn’t take itself too seriously and the alternative reality near the end of the script is a marvellous idea and a truly original scene. I liked the fact that the earlier explosions were a prelude to something bigger and unknown. I... read

Well Written

A review of The Shadow Hill Massacre

by K Jones on 11/20/2008

This is an extremely well written script. It has a completely original take on a well worn horror genre. What’s most impressive is the understanding that the best horror pics are underpinned by real human trauma. The best example I can think of to compare to is The Shining. These “old” people are desperate to cling onto their lives. It’s best characterised by Sally with her... read

The Maze

A review of The Maze

by K Jones on 11/07/2008

This is a script that completely knows it’s genre. I’m not an expert in the school of Saw and Hostel etc… but I haven’t seen a movie yet that has a central idea of a “maze.” If there isn’t one, then you’ve got a decent concept that needs a bit of work. Clowns are a very familar horror image. Something more original, may make this script more distinct. I thought the relationship... read

Very Good

A review of Principles of Buoyancy

by K Jones on 10/14/2008

I read an earlier draft of this script and enjoyed it. This version seems more polished. I like the new title, particularly as it is referred to in the script. It’s also a good description of the feel of the script – it has a light heightened style. I particularly liked the dream sequence where Albert’s mother shows him how to fly, even though in real she has unwittingly held... read

Good horror

A review of THE SOUL HARVESTER (Revised)

by K Jones on 10/07/2008

This is a well written, old fashioned horror story. I mean this in a good way. It’s a world away from the current cycle of Japanese influenced flicks. I like Norah - she’s an interesting lead. The secondary characters also seemed very rounded and defined. I was convinced most of the time, Christopher would turn out to be the bad guy. You have a visual imagination. The final... read

Star Wars or Solaris?

A review of CRYO

by K Jones on 01/07/2008

I’m not a huge Sci-Fi fan, but I find the stuff I like, tends to have a couple of really good ideas attached to a human story. They’re also usually action driven. This script’s got four or five fantastic ideas and lots of humanity and then just flies. The Cryo/vicryl concept really works, the identity switching, Kali. You’ve also got a great set up – that makes this script... read

Evil People

A review of Sunburnt

by K Jones on 12/27/2007

This was a pretty simple double-cross script. I enjoyed it, although I think it needs a few more drafts. None of the characters were very likeable until Luke came along. This is where the script worked for me the most – a guy kidnapped, in fear for life, trying to find a way to survive. It’s emotive and simple. I think Jake as character needs to be more charismatic, more... read

Ain't it funny

A review of Filthy Scum: A Carny Tail

by K Jones on 11/30/2007

This script is a guilty pleasure, that shows the talent of the writer, while the story, as written at the moment, doesn’t sustain. That said, it is filled with hilarious scenes and brilliant one-liners. I don’t have a problem with it being offence (although the baby stuff goes too far for my tastes), I don’t mind that none of the characters are very likeable. My difficulty,... read

Nearly Eureka

A review of Eurekaville (2nd draft)

by K Jones on 11/18/2007

There is a really imaginative idea behind this, but first a couple of notes: P25 A full seven days have floated past, and Helen hasn't produced a word. This doesn’t really follow the show, don’t tell rule – maybe Helen could be staring at a blank page. P26 Should be “West.” There were several blank spaces in the script. I liked a lot of this story. There’s good dialogue... read

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