kenbarber 

member since 10/19/2009 | last login 03/07/2012

Male, 63 Currently reside in CO....

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Male, 63 Currently reside in CO.

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Reviews by kenbarber 14

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    "13.45" needs more... Credited Review
    A review of 13.45 (part 1)
    by kenbarber on 02/16/2012
    Hello Jenny. I'll be real candid with you regarding this story. It was boring. Now I understand there is more to it but had to be separated due to length. That doesn't make it more interesting, but rather less. Step back for a moment and take a closer look at this story. Would you read about a kid that stepped on another kid while playing football? Perhaps the other pieces... read
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    "Subsistence" is a Twilight Zone. Credited Review
    A review of Subsistence
    by kenbarber on 02/07/2012
    Hello Reza. I think this piece could be adapted to the big screen. It pulled me in all the way the second time I read it. So many great situations you put Johnathan into and I thought your characters were perfect. On top of that, so many excellent phrases and descriptions such as, "Valley of Grief," "Their is no death there," "The gift of destiny,to beset salvation upon... read
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    THE RAMBLINGS OF AN ODD MAN Credited Review
    A review of THE RAMBLINGS OF AN ODD MAN
    by kenbarber on 02/01/2012
    Hello Jay. The story reminded me of Urban Cowboy with Dustin Hoffman playing the part of Rizzo. Maybe you are familiar with that movie or you are to young. The story line was ok but it seems to need more character development or something. In the beginning, Roger identified himself as being a tough guy, not caring about people's crap. Then he meets this stranger with a speech... read
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  • vieira4
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    vieira4 on 02/16/2012

    Btw, sorry if my last comment sounded ranty or overemotional. It wasn't meant to be. I just invested a lot of time and emotion in that story (it's the only one I've spent a significant amount of time rewriting) and I didn't get people not liking it. No story is for everyone :D Maybe the fact that there's too much of me in it is the problem, and it's unlikely to interest anyone who doesn't live in my head? We'll see what everyone else thinks. Best wishes.
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    vieira4 on 02/16/2012

    Hi Ken, thanks for your review. I'm sorry, but I just can't agree with it. If you found it boring, fine, and thank you for being honest, but I really think most people wouldn't. When I was writing this, it consumed all my thoughts - developing Mark's character, and the things that have happened in his past to make him the way he is (which will be revealed later on). I've written about the funny/annoying things that happen to him at school, hinted at his relationship with his mother and some kind of fascination with a professional player who wearss number 45 (which I'm hoping some people will understand straightaway, and others will figure it out as it goes on). I've explored his experiences of low-level, casual racism. I think there's plenty in there to interest most readers. Again, if my style is boring to you, that's fine, but I'm not going to change it. Thanks again.
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    SkylarX33 on 02/14/2012

    Thanks for the review of School Board and I appreciate the suggestions.
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