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Reviews

  • A review of Hell Swallowed Whole
    by hickok113 on 10/09/2014
    I am a fan of movies with a lot of action in them. This one had one hell of a fight scene. I thought having the main character suffer from agoraphobia was a nice touch to keep her rooted to the house even though her life depended on leaving it. The detail in your writing was very good. The gore scenes with the dwarf are very detailed, as was everything else. The bathroom... read
  • by Eric Maloney on 10/09/2014
    TriggerStreet doesn't have enough low-key dramas about ordinary people, so this one was a welcome change of pace. It fits nicely into the Hallmark/Lifetime mold. You've got a solid protagonist in Brenda--someone who is likeable and easy to empathize with--and the elements of a good story. Although the dialog is inconsistent, some of the scenes in which you have people interacting... read
  • by micheleraedejean on 10/09/2014
    The writing is decently done in this story but it is going to have a niche audience. I was born in a time when almost every legal and illegal drug known to man has been tried in (and I have tried many of them) and still I had trouble relating to this story. A drugged up woman, who is selling acid, sees a man with vague features and freaks out and describes her drug infused... read
  • by bhussey on 10/09/2014
    First of all, finishing a screenplay is no easy feat. I’ve got a pile of them sitting on my desktop right now, thirty to forty pages done and they’ll probably stay that way for a while. So five stars for actually completing it, the hardest part. This story is about Brenda, a widowed single mother of a troubled teen boy and a bright-eyed young daughter, trying to come to terms... read
  • A review of Monsters Inside
    by Melinda May on 10/09/2014
    Hi Johnny, Good writing, and an engaging story, plus the premise of “Monsters Inside” is quite interesting. It's largely about this relationship between Marla and Harold (what happens when a serial killer falls in love) which has nothing to do with Harold's killing, or the authorities' efforts to track Harold down. This perspective plays with the idea of a killer as both... read
  • by matt r jones on 10/09/2014
    I reviewed another in the 'Meat Grinder' series a few days ago and commented on how the atmosphere and the writers voice didn't come through as well as it could. This tale, in my opinion, is so much better in those regards. The previous was kind of step by step story telling where as this was not. You let us imagine the reasons for what was happening and led us on a journey... read
  • by RL Sterling on 10/09/2014
    BRENDA LEAVING REVIEW: Dita, Family drama is not my preferred movie genre, unless it’s like “True Lies” and things blow up. But I’ve had enough experience, both professionally and personally, to recognize a quality story that actually deserves praise, and perhaps more importantly, deserves to be told. Overall, your characters, story and dialogue are aces. Brenda, her family... read
  • A review of Last Visit-revision
    by hickok113 on 10/09/2014
    I thought the acting was good and the little actress playing "Amy" did very well. The floor creaking in the dark was nice and eerie . The first scare scene when the "Man" is now behind "Amy" startled the hell out of me, so that was well filmed and edited. For being about ten minutes, the time went fast and I didn't lose interest. I did think that the drawing of the "Man"... read
  • A review of REDtest
    by hickok113 on 10/09/2014
    I thought the idea to use one room was good for ease of shooting and time for set ups. The beginning music was good. I thought the actress was good for what was required of her and she was attractive with a nice laugh. The red gave it a distinct feel. I was hoping for more than just her standing at the bottom of the stairs. Maybe having the three girls interact or something... read
  • A review of Ghost Sniper
    by micheleraedejean on 10/08/2014
    Halloween is almost upon us, this was decently told but given the real horror of this story I think it needs a little more punch. I was looking forward to reading a good tale from the rating this story got and it was written in a pleasant fashion. These are the errors I noticed: “sipping cognac and brushing there (their) coats. “ ”better than what the’re (they’re) getting now... read
  • A review of Kill Ten
    by Adamrc on 10/08/2014
    Alright, there is no way to get around what I am about to tell you here but it must be said. You have a great deal of potential with this script, a great deal of it but where your problems lies is in the execution. And it is not even the execution of the story telling, characters, or the plot. There's one elephant in the room when it comes to the script and that is the length... read
  • by Anthony94 on 10/08/2014
    Just took notes as I read, just my thoughts throughout -- At the start on the first two pages, there's no point in having donald awake from that as a nightmare if you're going to jump ahead five years anyway, i'd suggest either showing it then jumping 5 years or have him have the nightmare 5 years later. page 4 - fairly well executed scene, i hope the repercussions... read
  • by RL Sterling on 10/08/2014
    APPRENTICE REVIEW: Paul, Okay, full disclosure, it’s my first time on Trigger Street. I can barely navigate the site, let alone competently submit a review. Hope this works. I’ll start with a joke. It’s relevant, so stay with me. Here’s the short version. >>An overbearing sales executive dies in a freak accident and finds himself at the Pearly Gates, but before entering,... read
  • by Russ2007 on 10/08/2014
    OPENING TWENTY FIVE PAGES: Questions you need to ask yourself: Do they establish the tone of the story? Do they set up the world this story is set in? Do these opening scenes hook and draw the reader into the world the characters live in? Are the opening pages written cleanly, efficiently and easy to follow? Are the character introductions long winded? STORY / PLOT: Is... read
  • A review of Truth in Advertising
    by TheRemedy on 10/08/2014
    Let's start off with all the good. Defined character goals. This is what seems to trip up a lot of amateur writers, having characters that don't know what they want. Here Abbey wants to get back at McNeil, McNeil wants to use Abbey to nab a client. This really helped move the story forward and feel like a quick read. The author gives us a good peak into the world of advertising... read