"You don’t write because you want to say something; you write because you’ve got something to say."

- F. Scott Fitzgerald

Reviews

  • A review of Indian Summer
    by Michael Leath on 10/21/2014
    This story has some passages that are quite compelling. But the over-all is an uneven tale. There are some errors in delivery, and the beginning falters as it gets into the tale. frankly when he meets the dwarf should have been the beginning just past a small introduction of the history of the plantation. Page 1 He came back to an empty house, battered from disrepair. This... read
  • A review of The Older Gods
    by telliott on 10/20/2014
    This story was uploaded nearly three years ago and does not have any posted reviews. Given the formatting of this story I can see why. Also, the synopsis is way too long. This is supposed to be a short story. Instead, its formatting is a hybrid between stage plays and screenplays. When I downloaded it the text was very small, too small to read. I haven’t had that problem with... read
  • A review of Reviewing Rachel
    by telliott on 10/20/2014
    Bloody hell! This story was just … bloody well written. As with the writer’s other story I have had the pleasure of reading, all I have to offer are some nitpickin’ details. Page 1: Nick was proud of the tales he wove during the late hours of the evening, which a few writers stated that his words brought them to tears. This is the only sentence that drew me out of the story... read
  • A review of Reviewing Rachel
    by chaplin64 on 10/20/2014
    The concept of one writer plagiarizing another, and then as a result his incurring terrible repercussions has been done before. Stephen King's Secret Window pretty much covered it. That particular author is even mentioned in the story which could be considered bad form really. The dialogue was good, but the main character was not fleshed out enough while the female vampire... read
  • A review of Indian Summer
    by Collette on 10/20/2014
    Dear Sergiev, I like stuff like this, I like stories that are a bit out there and have something to say. I wouldn't say its a great short story though, although it does pick up on page twelve. You can tell that somewhere in there is a really good story trying to get out. If I was you I'd dump the whole magic thing altogether. You obviously done research on the plantations... read
  • A review of The Rebellious Son
    by telliott on 10/19/2014
    The first sentence of this story had me somewhat leery. “Even my father wanted me to be of the stereotype!” This sentence begs for rewording. How about: Even my father envisioned me as a stereotype! As written, the sentence reads a bit awkwardly. The writer uses exclamation points in excess. Three in the first paragraph on page 1. One in the second paragraph. One in the fourth... read
  • A review of Junk Food
    by Michael Leath on 10/19/2014
    Nice to see your name in my queue again so soon. I enjoyed your last story a great deal. Page 1 Just a suggestion I think I will make to all the authors I see here. Either a header or a footer – in your case you have those marvelous page numbers at the bottom, so this would be at the top. © should be on every page with your name. Hold down Alt plus 00169 if you write on... read
  • A review of Somus
    by telliott on 10/19/2014
    This story reminds me of an O. Henry short. A man invents a machine to capture his dying wife’s consciousness. However, she wants a life without the intrusive machine. She dies. He has a life without her consciousness. Or something like that – I think. This story is representative of the way society is heading. People communicate via skype, cell phones, text messages, emails,... read
  • A review of Junk Food
    by shastina456 on 10/19/2014
    The title was clever, because junk had two meanings in this case. One meaning for the junkie himself, and, one for the food he would become. Funny how the diners liked the smoked meat so much. You misspelled sheriff and barrel a few times. The ending felt too abrupt to me. I think this story could have been more creepy if there were other criminals hanging in a freezer, and... read
  • A review of When I Woke
    by MoMo5Mia on 10/19/2014
    This was a very short story. I do believe multiple flashbacks leading up to the ending realization would have helped make this story richer. I would have liked it when, at the end when John wakes up, I could feel his pain more. If it could have made me feel like I just woke up from something. Maybe I am asking for a little too much. I am just trying to reach out to another... read
  • A review of Wilby
    by theauthor on 10/19/2014
    A short tale of being bullied and beaten by three boys. I think the beginning of the story needs to lay a better foundation of what the three boys were like at school. Secondly, have the main event occur on one day, not over three days. (Because, in the beginning, you have the character describing the worst day of his life with a lengthy description. But, the action is really... read
  • A review of Indigo
    by theauthor on 10/19/2014
    A good legitimate story told in a clear concise manner. You painted a good picture of the girl and the event. I enjoyed watching where this story was going. The ending was as cute as Indigo was. The initial part where she flirts seemed a little rushed and jumpy. But, understandably, it has to be paced fairly quickly. I think an extra sentence or two of dialogue could make this... read
  • A review of Indigo
    by telliott on 10/19/2014
    I have read reviews by this writer. His reviews contain a sensitivity that mine certainly lack. His reviews make you WANT to rewrite a story. That said, little exists that merits a re-write in this story. Favorite sentences/fragments abound. Skin of a woman who worked out several hours a day. So much so I wanted to reach across her to fetch my sun glasses. Just enough to... read
  • A review of Indigo
    by rexb99 on 10/19/2014
    I was very impressed with this story. It crackles with character and gets to the point with a very well crafted structure. The dialogue is just curious enough to be compelling without being obscure. This is how flash fiction is done. Through deft slight of hand we get to know the characters remarkably well and are led down what appears to be a fairly straight forward path... read
  • Fly Credited Review
    A review of Fly
    by telliott on 10/18/2014
    I have read and reviewed a few stories by this writer. He is showing his versatility with Fly mainly because the other stories I have reviewed were written in a colloquial, folksy tone. Not so with this one. However, the tone of the story is appropriate for a wartime setting. The writer has talent by the butt load but, IMHO, that talent can be harnessed to engage the reader... read
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