"No one ever went broke in Hollywood underestimating the intelligence of the public."

- Elsa Maxwell


  • A review of Fait Accompli
    by cmcloughlin1218 on 08/08/2014
    I've never been to Vegas. I'm not saying that it would be dangerous for me, or that I'm scared of sin city, but I know the kind of trouble I've gotten into in Columbus Ohio without the allure of twenty four hour temptation so I opt to take the kids to Myrtle Beach instead. This is a good twist on a familiar story. I would like to see what Nancy would do to her enemy at the... read
  • A review of Fait Accompli
    by williamf129 on 08/08/2014
    I read these assignments first for entertainment (that is to say, I hope to be entertained), next, hopefully, to be enlightened in some way by the theme, intrigued by the premise, or blown away by the author's voice, or style. And I write the reviews, not to flatter or demean, but to be helpful. I will do my best now to be helpful. The premise is good. The writing is dreadful... read
  • A review of Peace of War
    by VonNiederauer on 08/08/2014
    Writing war pieces are difficult on so many levels. This short story gives us a glimpse into the hellish life of a soldier, and true to the genre it offers that twist ending. Cliches are often hard to avoid when depicting soldiers because the very nature of being a soldier means you must put aside your individuality and become a selfless fighter. however you were able to... read
  • A review of Junk Food
    by Jaybird2019 on 08/07/2014
    Although, the concept of humans being used as delicious meat in a diner has been rehashed it still didn't take away from this stories originality. In fact, the writer did a great job bringing us along with no real intuition as to what Judd was going to do with Leroy. This was a very quick read, meaning enjoyable. And the writers prose was very easy to follow. In a way, the... read
  • A review of Peace of War
    by shastina456 on 08/07/2014
    I wished you would have wrote more about Big Dog Davlin and Ollie Odin. I wanted to know more about them. For examples: Kemp saying, " We have to kill Ollie Odin for putting ecoli in the people's drinking water; and, Johnny saying, " Big Dog Davlin was the king of the jungles. He would always lead victorious battles, even in the darkest, densist jungles. " Please, check your... read
  • by cmcloughlin1218 on 08/07/2014
    I enjoyed this period piece. I have never met a tugboat captain before so I was rather unfamiliar with their ways of life. The story moved forward pretty quickly. I did not see too many misspelled words, grammatical errors or sentence fragments. Something I didn't quite understand is that the wife did not play a very big role in the narrators story, or even his life from what... read
  • A review of Monsters In The House
    by cmcloughlin1218 on 08/07/2014
    I realize that these things go on everyday probably not far from where I live, but it still scares me to read them. I have two little girls, and if they went through anything like this I would probably kill someone, or at the very least ruin their lives. Fear seems to keep the process moving forward for the monsters that touch people against their will. I do not understand... read
  • A review of My Johnny
    by taijinkyofusho on 08/06/2014
    While I can most definitely appreciate a carefully crafted tale of boundless friendship, there's quite simply far too much vague language throughout for the story to really get stuck in my mind. I have trouble visualizing the people or places in this story. I can't latch onto any of them at all in fact. There's a lot of minor text issues that need to be cleaned up as well (quotation... read
  • A review of Cupid on the Moon
    by taijinkyofusho on 08/06/2014
    Fair warning: I usually have little to no tolerance for anything sci-fi-related. And, truth be told, this story gets pretty bogged down pretty quickly the way most sci-fi stories do: ultra-specific descriptions of high-tech futuristic machinery, etc. But, even as the cliches abound, you manage to carve out your own lane within the confines of the genre. While the copy is clean,... read
  • by Jaybird2019 on 08/06/2014
    I wish I had received the first part. But the synopsis you gave on the first page brought me up to speed with the story. This is my second story reading from you. And I have to say, you have a knack for western and country lingo. The story was comical but held deep truths like your last one. Marriage is something people have grown to take lightly and you showed that with... read
  • A review of Cupid on the Moon
    by theauthor on 08/06/2014
    Nice job of creating a future world. This had a nice tie-in with other human memory based stories. Robin Williams and Keanu Reeves, right? The first half needed more dialogue. The second half had lots of dialogue, but lacked enough story to create tension, intrigue, or mystery. The very beginning needs to have some more substance, besides a character who uploads his memories... read
  • A review of Aswang Abomination
    by lavel on 08/06/2014
    Needs more improvement in telling this story. It came off a bit corny, especially about a woman eating her babies because they died. It doesn't sound realistic; for a mother who is angry, I don't think she doesn't want to disturb the body of her dead child unless she is sadistically out of it. Believability lacks in this story, greatly. You must enlivened the minds of your... read
  • A review of Paper Bull
    by taijinkyofusho on 08/06/2014
    This is a strange piece to be sure. In a quirky, nuanced, flavorful way though. Do you like Jarmusch at all? It seems like you might. Page 2, near the bottom: It's should be its. You probably already knew this. "cuz bullshit on paper is better received than bullshit simply spoken" - put this on a t-shirt and sell it ASAP. The story is filled to the brim with delicious quotes... read
  • A review of Junk Food
    by Cab Coola on 08/06/2014
    Hey cmcloughlim1218, I was excited to finally get the opportunity to return the favor for reviewing a couple of mine. I enjoyed this story immensely. It was 'Motel Hell' meets 'Texas Chainsaw Massacre' meets 'Sweeney Todd'. The writing was crisp and to the point. And there were no hiccups or typos that distracted me during the entire read. The dialogue between the three characters... read
  • A review of Thief In The Night
    by VonNiederauer on 08/06/2014
    The story begins with a very blunt description of a man entering a home, making a sandwich and leaving. The unadorned writing reads more like a police report than a short story. The concept is an interesting one but the mystery of it is quickly undermined by the author through the inability to create more suspense. I liked the dialogue of the first victim's awkward call to... read