"In this world there are only two tragedies: one is not getting what one wants and the other is getting it."

- Oscar Wilde


  • A review of 4 WAY STOP
    by Cab Coola on 07/13/2014
    I don't know too much about screenplay formats or rules so I can't offer advice or corrections. But I will tell ya what I thought of the story. It was good. You did a great job of giving each character their own distinguishable personality. Although at first, the flood of characters confused me, it wasn't long before I got a grasp on them. The story itself, reminded me of a... read
  • A review of Let Them Come Apart
    by aaandronova on 07/13/2014
    First of all, I ‘d like to mention what I do not write about in my reviews: 1. Since I am not a native English speaker, I mostly do not write about dialogue and grammar errors. 2. Also I do not write about structure because I have no idea what it is. As I don’t know whether this much talked-about structure is good or bad, I always mark 5 stars and that’s it! 3. I do not write... read
  • A review of I Chanced Upon a Faun
    by Cab Coola on 07/13/2014
    This was a well written fantasy about the legend of a rustic forest god. The structure was clean and the concept very interesting which kept my attention throughout. I couldn't spot any typo's or any errors and I thought the story was flawless besides the end. I didn't really understand why she wanted to break up the family they just started. It seemed they were surviving... read
  • A review of Haiti's Hope
    by stanlukas on 07/13/2014
    I tried, I really did try to get into this story. The dialog was vulgar but good. There was way too many characters, more than 27 so it was hard to keep track of what was going on. Your writing is more for a novel then a screen play. Way to much talk and not enough show. Some things you wrote like page 6 "Sondy could care less about Ritchies situation." This has to be show... read
  • by Last Fountain on 07/13/2014
    Meet Elaine, she just survived the zombie apocalypse. Meet Cora, her zombie best-friend battling infection to maintain her human qualities. This fresh approach to the whole zombie craze is actually quite an intelligent reimagining on the virus. This isn’t your average popcorn-munching zombie flick, it’s a mature examination on humanity, sacrifice, and loss – think more WORLD... read
  • A review of Clean Before Loading
    by Studio2grl on 07/14/2014
    "Clean before Loading" is a cute idea. Shorts need to be really funny, insightful, or just sort of clever. I'd say you covered the last two pretty well. I love the set up with your male protagonist alone in the laundry mat. Some nice shots and we all get that the couple in the corner make him uncomfortable. It was a nice touch to bring them back at the end for the bookend... read
  • A review of 13.45 (part 1)
    by micheleraedejean on 07/14/2014
    Well the other 13:45 story didn’t explain why the story was called 13:45 as this one did but this story on the whole was slow and boring. I haven’t the slightest interest in soccer and so I don’t care or understand any of the things that were said about it. The way Mark talks sounds pretty mature for a thirteen year old, I’m not saying it’s not possible just not anything like... read
  • A review of No Not Nice
    by Cab Coola on 07/14/2014
    Hey John, you have another good one. As always it was well written and structurally flawless. I've noticed from reading several of your works that a lot of your stories come from real life experiences. And I have to believe this was another. I think anyone who has ever been to school has seen this very scene themselves, the big jock picking on the smaller weaker classmate... read
  • A review of Logan
    by Cab Coola on 07/14/2014
    We need a follow up ASAP! The cold is out of the way and now it's time for his battle with cancer. This story was fun and interesting. I still can't decide if it was a metaphor for his cold strangling the life from him or a 'real' experience. It was exciting either way. The happenings in side the farmhouse was intense and kept me on the edge of my seat throughout. The descriptions... read
  • A review of Squirrel Impossible
    by Adamrc on 07/14/2014
    I'll tell you, this script is a great example of how simplicity can go a long way in the movie business. And underneath all the stuff like scenes being out of order and other light formatting issues, this script has potential to get made over many other script that I have read on this site over the last few months. I'm trying to wrap my head around that last sentence right... read
  • A review of Beach House
    by bengutteridge on 07/14/2014
    I know a lot of people like these kind of ironic films but personally they leave me cold. I'm sure the people that made it had a lot of fun making it and it is kind of fun to watch i guess but really while It's meant to be ironically bad - for me it really just seems bad.. I'm sure these guys could come up with something more original if they tried.
  • A review of Haiti's Hope
    by mdoliner on 07/14/2014
    Review of Haiti's hope. A movie about a historical event offers the audience a different sort of expectation from a complete fiction film. What is the “Ball Drop?” The first scene introduces the audience to the ambiance of the market... fine. You have a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes. You introduce a lot of characters, but I can't tell which is the protagonist... read
  • A review of The Carved Pumpkin
    by bengutteridge on 07/14/2014
    Ok so this is what it's all about. This film might essentially be someone mucking around with a pumpkin and filming it be oh what great mucking around it is.. there are a lot of great ideas in here, moments of comedy, tension, yes I realise that it is what it is but I remember this guy from another review i did ages ago and this guy has real talent and here again it shows (allbeit... read
  • A review of Robinson's Cruesoe
    by zardoz13 on 07/14/2014
    This is a fun story. There is a great deal of excitement and twists and turns. The pace was quick and on point. There was a good Third Act twist when Julani was kidnapped. The happy ending was satisfying, everything was tied up nicely. Dialogue and the use of humor work well for the most part. Now for what needs improving. There are a number of grammatical errors: missing... read
  • A review of Blot
    by tonymcfadden on 07/14/2014
    With far too much dialog, unnecessary topical references and far, far, too much dialog (I know, I'm guilty of the same thing in my early screenplays), this needs a serious polish. The plot - a party at a housesitting house and everything that setting it up entails (And the repercussions after) could make a good comedy, but 122 pages is too long, by about 30 pages. Dialog is... read