Reviews

  • A review of Wilby
    by micheleraedejean on 05/31/2014
    This brought back memories of when I won a stuffed lion for a dime that was bigger than I was at six years old. Well done. You described the games and carnival well and I liked that your parents gave you money to play the games while they went to the beer garden and I wish it had been safe to do that at the time when I took the kids to the fair. Rocko, Billy and Biff reminded... read
  • A review of Lavender Panthers
    by littlebluejane on 05/31/2014
    The concept here is a very strong one and I think the struggle for gay rights is no less important now than it was during the time frame this piece was set to. I like the focus given to the discrimination and physical harrassment the LGBT community has faced and continues to face today. You clearly see how the characters in this story were ostracized at home, in the workplace,... read
  • A review of 206 rev 3
    by **DELETED ACCOUNT** on 05/31/2014
    Shortly into the story, I recognized that ‘206’ is about H.H. HOLMS, a prolific serial killer. He lived in Chicago in the late nineteenth century; killed many—in every imaginable way. I’ve seen a couple of documentaries on this evil beast and I also remember that he hit his stride during the ‘World’s Fair’. I liked your opening with Holms as a young boy in New Hampshire;... read
  • A review of Next-of-Kin
    by tishanddavid on 05/31/2014
    First off - you've had, 68 an Im making it 69 reviews, I'm assuming that you're just posting this hoping to not so much get reviews ,but that someone will come across this and want to see a finished product. That's great marketing, however as good as this is - its not really a short story is it? Read one of your stories about the chauffeur not so long ago an enjoyed it very... read
  • A review of The Second Coming
    by EliDonaldson on 05/31/2014
    Concept: This is quite a creative concept, the cloning of Jesus. I can only think of one other movie that travels in similar territory - Monty Python's "The Life of Brian" - though it is also quite a bit different in that Brian has no ties to Jesus other than that people are mistaken. Characters: Overall, you did a good job with characters. However, I really think Trey... read
  • A review of Alone
    by RReDD on 05/31/2014
    Thank you for letting me review your screenplay. It really was an enjoyable read as it moved quite quickly and I found myself wondering what was going to happen next. I found the premise of the story to be very good and I think you have a foundation for something great. Where I found it lacking was in the character development. I do think you could have gone in to a bit more... read
  • by micheleraedejean on 05/31/2014
    This story has an awfully long and silly title. I would call this a children’s story except they wouldn’t know who Fat’s Domino, Elvis or all the rest of the names mentioned in this story are. I have read several of your stories and this one is rather wacky in comparison. It’s not that it’s bad but it reads more like a comic strip than a short story for adults. It is too silly... read
  • A review of Lavender Panthers
    by Russ2007 on 05/31/2014
    OPENING TWENTY FIVE PAGES: Questions you need to ask yourself: Do they establish the tone of the story? Do they set up the world this story is set in? Do these opening scenes hook and draw the reader into the world the characters live in? Are the opening pages written cleanly, efficiently and easy to follow? Are the character introductions long winded? STORY / PLOT: Is... read
  • A review of Forms of Life v.2
    by Adamrc on 06/01/2014
    I have to say after reading the summary of your script I could agree with more. This is definitely something that John Waters would be proud of. All this interesting quirks about the main character topped off with a this flash back format that compliments the story really good. I have gone over a couple scenes a couple of times and there is something very interesting about... read
  • by RachelWoolley on 06/01/2014
    There were some funny moments that I enjoyed in this script. For example, I liked the “Who’s on first” banter about the name of “The Restaurant.” And I loved when Seth hip hops his pickup line later at the bar. But that said, I know I’m definitely not the target audience for this movie. Both the story and the dialogue felt like they were aimed at males in their late... read
  • by tishanddavid on 06/01/2014
    Hi Rex! Great to finally get to read one of your short stories, I guess Davey beat me to the last one.This was a fine existential piece. Very nice to get to read a short story that tackles this subject without coming off as an essay or a self help book. Believe me - you, I've had my share of reading a lot of preaching on this subject, here on good old TS. Good premise to... read
  • A review of Glimpse
    by tishanddavid on 06/01/2014
    Hi Nick this reminded me of Kings short story The Moving Finger. Not sure if you've read that, but Ive a feeling you have. If you did then this must have inspired you to some large extent. Ive been an avid reader of horror since I was a little kid an my mother an I would buy boxes of just a step above a penny dreadful,at used book stores and garage sales .All that campy stuff... read
  • A review of Midnight Ride
    by tishanddavid on 06/01/2014
    Hi Ive read you before, and honestly relieved to see you cut the violence down on this one drastically. This was VERY short, I wince when I see a story jammed into 2 pages, it usually means there's not a lot to be expected. That pretty much held true for me on this one as well. The last few paragraphs you wrote that it was the first time he had smiled in weeks. THAT to me said... read
  • by sergiev2 on 06/01/2014
    Hey Rex, I was excited that I got another one of your stories down the pipeline. After having read Hearing The Meat, I was tickled at another chance to review your work. I got lost. Jimmy worked in a fishery, had some misunderstanding with his coworker, lopped off his ear, got drunk, took some sleazy broad to his parents house and fucked everything up? Wouldn't his work... read
  • A review of Alligator
    by kevindjack30 on 06/01/2014
    When I first started reading this story I automatically seen where everyone was. t was either due to me having friends from Louisiana or because I live in Florida, but the swamp as well as the alligators seemed familiar. I love the dialect the story was spoken in, It felt more authentic as the story progressed. Seeing the direction of where the story was headed I can sympathize... read