"Imagination is not a talent of some men but is the health of every man."

- Ralph Waldo Emerson


  • A review of Positive (+) Rev
    by hanzgruber on 12/20/2013
    Holy cow this is pulp. The grit drips off this thing. I don’t know how, but the visuals in the script stay pretty vivid the entire time. The characters can feel a bit shallow, and I think the plot tries to accomplish too much with too little, but I really enjoyed this script. First the good. Again from beginning to end the author paints a vivid, grimy picture with each scene... read
  • A review of Live Tv (V3)
    by mephostopheles on 12/20/2013
    Hi. It was great to read your script. I have just a few comments. Let me start by saying that I enjoyed the concept. It's interesting to think about and imagine what might happen if someone were to pull off a stunt like hijacking a television station, all to get their message out to the rest of the world. My major criticisms would be that the focus seems to linger primarily... read
  • by WillMorris26 on 12/20/2013
    To begin you have some dated video editing and poor motion graphics work which is not only painful on the eye but it makes you feel as if a 4 year old had edited it. But when it continues you begin to like Elmar as a person and you gain interest in to what he's saying to you. He does a good job of laying down the facts without being too boring.
  • by Robot Rowboat on 12/20/2013
    This is the second first-draft script by this writer I’ve reviewed (the other being Fugue States), and again I find myself admiring a lot of what is already in place: the writing is of a high order, with well-turned, evocative action lines and a good sense of tone. Additionally there are some very clever pay-offs to neat setups, a great opening sequence and an ending which... read
  • A review of THE DECISION
    by bharrod321 on 12/20/2013
    “The Decision" is a script that yearns to be more than what it is. It feels the like shell of a story that is not fully developed yet. It reads easily, yet doesn’t entertain or hold one’s interest. The stakes needed for it to feel like character drama are not present while the humor isn’t present enough to call it a comedy. The script seems to be stuck between the two not... read
  • A review of Reeled In
    by EugyBizzaro on 12/20/2013
    This short film starts out with two guys setup for a nice little fishing trip away from it all. The Boss and the Employee sit down for a beer and a chat. It comes out that the Employees wife has been missing for a week. The Boss says maybe he should talk about it and get it out. The Employee says that his Boss should talk he is single. They quarrel and the Boss goes on a walk... read
  • A review of Shelter by the Sea
    by EugyBizzaro on 12/20/2013
    This short film has true heart and is perfect little jewel of film. The contrast of this beautiful abandoned summer home by the sea and the fact that the Homeless Man is living there is stark. The Haves and the Have Nots. The subject matter is suburb. The Homeless Man is well read and the film just lets him speak. His words are his. This film simply lets him be. Things are... read
  • A review of The Sorcerer's Eyes
    by WillMorris26 on 12/20/2013
    A well crafted piece that opens up your imagination and lures you in to a place you can get lost in. Well written. Could easily be further written to a full script which I can see being made in to an actual film. There is definitely more to explore but that can be resolved with more pages and hopefully the world and characters will open further. Look to see more from this... read
  • A review of Positive (+) Rev
    by Arthurfishel on 12/20/2013
    I gotta say I love this visceral script but the structure could use work. The third act is a bit lacking because the latter half of the 2nd act is not as strong as it needs to be. You need to study your plot points and try and figure out what they are in the script. You have some talent, especially the dialog. It could be trimmed a little here and there but over all I got separate... read
  • by FirstAndLastFilms on 12/20/2013
    Overall, Dark Places in the Sunshine, was a well crafted piece of independent cinema. But like all works of art, it is not without it's faults. But I don't like to focus on the negative because who am I to judge. The cinematography was beautiful, for the most part and the editing was tight, pacing was good. At not one point did I feel the story lagged. The majority of the acting... read
  • A review of I Chanced Upon a Faun
    by micheleraedejean on 12/20/2013
    This is an entertaining little story with no particular point other than to entertain. It is written in a poetic style and there are a few errors. I have to say that I don’t know much about the mythical “faun” other than the creature Pan from Greek mythology. I was always intrigued by the concept of centaurs and satyrs. This is interesting take on those tales. I thought the... read
  • A review of Plastic Hollywood
    by johnregan on 12/21/2013
    Plastic Hollywood Review – John Regan Good writing and story. I love the self-deprecating humor and delivery (dialog) of Jim on page 5. It had me laughing and hooked on this character from the get-go. Good tight dialog for the most part. I can see the hard work that went into it by how lean it is. It took me a few reads to fully understand the lingo: Cargatory = Purgatory... read
  • by micheleraedejean on 12/21/2013
    Speculation about things we can never know. This is something we humans never get tired of doing. I can’t say this is an accurate portrayal of what artificial intelligence would think like and I can’t say that it isn’t. I also can’t say that I believe that a robot can think but I guess if it could your ideas on what it might be like are as good as any. Nice foray into thoughts... read
  • A review of Lucy's Lane
    by johnregan on 12/21/2013
    Hi Morris, Being a fan of the public house and history, I really enjoyed this story. It moves swiftly and with enough deft twists to not giveaway or telegraph the twist at the end. I did not see it coming and that is good writing. The fight scenes were well-written as were the bar room descriptions. I only have a few suggestions below. This looks like it should be possessive... read
  • A review of Scal's Big Tip
    by brokenarrow on 12/22/2013
    Well, who said you can't learn from movies... I now remember how to grasp a golf club – Thanks! Having had a job that relied on tips to supplement income, I had to check out your short movie. You did a very good job with the whole production; from story, to actors, to scene location, lighting, direction, angle on, close-ups, daydreams, and a very hats off to your editing –... read
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