"Art flourishes where there is a sense of adventure."

- Alfred North Whitehead


  • A review of THE MAFIA TYPE
    by Akinscribe5 on 03/30/2014
    The misdirection of the opening promises a narrative that will pay off that which is set up at the top. The Al Pacino reference pushes us out of the narrative to flashes of stronger filmmaking with better performances. As our protagonist faces no obstacles, never fails, & fears nothing, we are robbed of any triumph when he gets the money. The twist ending is a punchline that... read
  • A review of Skillet
    by Akinscribe5 on 03/30/2014
    I'm actually a huge horror fan & it doesn't take much for me to appreciate a horror film - but this short lacked any of the promises horror offers. There was no suspense, no chase, & even the gore factor was a let down. For starters, if you're going to give me a Wolf Creek, Mick Taylor villain, he's got to actually be frightening. Neither actor was committed to the moment so... read
  • A review of Monsters In The House
    by Casey Major-Lehto on 03/30/2014
    The concept of your story is a strong one and also one that should be told. I feel this society is moving out of the "don't air your dirty laundry" era into a "I need to get this off my chest and hopefully it will help others" era. We can't fix something if we don't know it's broken. Bravo to you for telling a tale like this. The characters were a bit flat. The girls age was... read
  • A review of The Last Thanksgiving
    by writer546 on 03/30/2014
    I want to start off by saying that you write well. I haven't seen too many stories about repairmen so that makes it a little different. You do a good job setting things up. I felt like I was in James' world. You also do well with characterization. The one thing that I felt could be improved upon was the conflict in the story. I think part of the problem is that it gets... read
  • A review of Finding the Words
    by max sappa on 03/30/2014
    'I am sorry' 'no'... I get that sometimes we do overthink words before we say them to anyone. I understand that eventually what it can come out of somebody's mouth is just an apology which is negated by the other person. Yet, I didn't feel fulfilled watching this short! I think that what is missing here is the hint of his mistakes. I would like to have a little insight (not... read
  • A review of Reaper
    by Morphindel on 03/31/2014
    I actually gave your other script Hard Time Harvey a pretty positive review if I recall, so it is odd to write one that isn't particularly glowing. It feels like this was written by someone completely different. Reaper is script with a good concept and neat concise formatting, but after an interesting opening 20 pages or so seems to spiral into a meandering (and I hate to... read
  • A review of A Mother's Child
    by rexb99 on 03/31/2014
    As I go I get the feeling I'm reading something novelized from a screenplay; there are good action sequences and sharp dialogue, (though Keln says 'Boy' too often. It becomes irritating when one visualizes the scenes playing out). The descriptions of the country side and the storm are vivid. I think a longer work like this would be pretty good. It's a lot of work but you're... read
  • A review of Bed In The Straw v2
    by htinney on 03/31/2014
    First, let me say how refreshing it was to receive such a clean and well written review assignment. This was easy reading with a clear theme, memorable characters and an interesting and thought provoking story. It does, however, still have some room for improvement. I feel as though this screenplay jumps into the story almost a little too late. We never get to see Ben before... read
  • by rexb99 on 03/31/2014
    This story reminds me of some of the best first-person shooters that I've played; full of action and mythology. Lots of side stories of elves and wizards, magic swords and god-like royalty. Very engaging. A human plummeting at terminal velocity--or at least to fast the the atmosphere roars in his ears--should never attempt to grab onto something that is stationary. He'd be... read
  • A review of Scal's Big Tip
    by rexb99 on 03/31/2014
    Ha, ha. This film reminds me one of those silent comedy shorts from the 20s. Sort of a modern version. Not just because it was silent and not because I'm an old guy. (I wasn't there either.) It's because it has that kind of broad humour and morality that seems to have played well in those days. It still plays well today. You've got a good sense of cinema and it looks like you... read
  • A review of Reaper
    by chucksanders62 on 03/31/2014
    I found REAPER to be a well-done psychological study. Mitch's deterioration into guilt, self-blame, and depression was entirely believable. Tiffany, Mitch’s love interest, was well-drawn as a damaged, yet heart of gold single mother who works as a stripper in the sex shot frequented by Mitch. REAPER’s plotting was tight. For the most part the characterization was well-written,... read
  • A review of The Last Thanksgiving
    by whiskeytango101 on 03/31/2014
    I have to say that I really related to this story. My husband is an HVAC guy and we live in Arizona. During the eight months of summer, he's lucky to be home after 12-14 hours of work, and I have re-warmed MANY dinners that are never quite as good the second time around, and I won't even start with our 45-minute Christmas last year because he was on call. ALSO, he has told... read
  • A review of exit here.
    by InPost on 03/31/2014
    After watching this, two things come to mind. One, don't do drugs. Two, trigger street really needs to create a new category for what I would call a 'scene study'. This type of "short film" really doesn't satisfy many of the requirements of what I personally would consider a short film. Particularly, a narrative. If I really rack my brain, I can maybe come up with a few concepts... read
  • A review of Respect 101
    by InPost on 03/31/2014
    At times, shorts on TS are almost painful to watch, and I feel the same terror the boy on the floor does when I hit the play button. But lucky for me, and the kid, there are some good ones out there. And this is definitely one of them. Technically, it is done very professionally, so I won't waste too much time going over the basics. Although I will say that the victim does... read
  • A review of Leaving Wyoming
    by wesleytaylor on 03/31/2014
    Let's start small and go big with this one. First of all your writing is very sparse and dialogue heavy. Nothing wrong with that, in fact it made for a speedy read which is always nice. Some of your sentences are oddly worded with missing or jumbled words. Lots of grammatical mistakes. There are also some format mistakes such as pg. 9 the scene heading can't be that long, INT... read
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