"All the really good ideas I ever had came to me while I was milking a cow."

- Grant Wood


  • A review of Monsters In The House
    by nlachmund on 03/28/2014
    Firstly I'll say that the subject matter that it is tackled is extremely confronting and it is wonderfully presented from the POV of the two girls. I think the main thing lacking is a sufficient ending. I felt that it wrapped up a little bit too quick and I thought the final paragraph could have been drawn out to two paragraphs. The dialogue is also a touch clunky. I'm not... read
  • A review of 206 rev 3
    by Lloyd Nail on 03/28/2014
    What a great story! Your screenplay inspired me to go off and read about Henry Holmes / Herman Mudgett which I hope you will take as a huge compliment. Your work thoroughly does justice to his fascinatingly macabre life. It is a very easy read with some great dialogue. I made notes as I went through the script and have just extracted the main ones below: *THE OPENING – Great... read
  • A review of Simple Acts (Revised)
    by jonberko on 03/28/2014
    Thank you so much for sharing your work! I really enjoyed reading Simple Acts and found it to be heartwarming and uplifting. Concept: The concept is great. Joe is a pessimistic and awful person when we first meet him. His world comes crashing down and he hits rock bottom, only to be built back up by a family he doesn't know. He and the Fishers help each other and Joe... read
  • A review of The Arrival
    by James Blackford on 03/28/2014
    As I read I looked for areas to critique, and it was hard to find. The only real thing that threw me was the narrative. At times it seemed like more of a “hey this is what happened and this is what I feel about it? Instead of a story format. Like… “You couldn’t trust anybody. But this one guy, his face was still so clear – the tank pushed his car off to the side of the road... read
  • by rexb99 on 03/29/2014
    As far as it goes, this is a decent sketch of a character and his situation that takes place in a very distant future. A strange time when travel between galaxies is common place for an elite class but the administrators processing their applications still use nineteenth century office implements. Charming. Something that Terry Gilliam might find amusing. (I would point out... read
  • A review of Hearing The Meat
    by James Blackford on 03/29/2014
    You have a talent for writing and your words show a natural ease for getting your intentions on the page. The mood of this story was thick and exactly what you had intended I think. You paint a picture of a solitary man, living with his thoughts in an odd situation that shape the way he views and feels about the world. The words used to describe this stay in the same hue as... read
  • A review of 8 Count
    by moviexpert14 on 03/29/2014
    I really love boxing movies and this would be another one of them if turned into film. It was something different and more a darker boxing story. I loved the villain of the movie. Typical hot shit champ who only gets ahead fighting chumps and avoiding fights with real contenders. The protagonist storyline was a lot like a Rocky with a little of Jimmy Smits Price of Glory which... read
  • A review of A cowboys life
    by rexb99 on 03/29/2014
    Warren, you've managed to draw an environment thick with atmosphere. I can almost smell the gator skins and the cow pens. 'course I've worked on a farm, so it's not too hard, with the help of your descriptions, to get my mind around the Rafter J. Very good. You have to be careful about tense; you have both past and present tense mixed throughout. Here's what I mean: 'I slid... read
  • by rexb99 on 03/29/2014
    Try to keep the identity of who is talking and who they are talking about. Here's what I mean: 'That’s right, the person who runs at the sight of a needle, taking out doctors and nurses in her path has written “get a tattoo” on my list,' In this sentence you would want to say "get a tattoo on her list' because, for the moment, you are quoting your character, as she refers... read
  • A review of Hearing The Meat
    by whiskeytango101 on 03/29/2014
    I was really looking forward to reading one of your stories, and I was not disappointed at all. HEARING THE MEAT is original, well-researched, intelligent, and ironic. I received my Masters degree from the School of Hard Knocks, and so I have very little knowledge of what is 'right' or 'wrong' with a story. I can only make assessments based on my level of enjoyment, and my... read
  • A review of The Arrival
    by micheleraedejean on 03/29/2014
    This was a nicely written tale about a man having a brush with love at first sight. The writing was good although at times it rambled off in different directions as if we were reading someone’s random thoughts about their life. The story was presented in a fairly believable way, although the airplane trip to win the girl seemed unlikely as well as the reason the girl said she... read
  • A review of Hearing The Meat
    by micheleraedejean on 03/29/2014
    It was a dark and creepy night at the meat plant! I’ve got to say you have a very active imagination to come up with this story. The concept of artificially grown meat has certainly been studied so I guess it isn’t out of the realm of being believable. Now saying this artificial meat has consciousness might be pushing it since I always thought a brain had to be involved for... read
  • A review of Reaper
    by JSANHUEZA on 03/29/2014
    Hi Michael, I just finished your script for Reaper. Congrats on the draft, I think you've taken what has been a widely used premise but attacked it from a new angle(from the pov of the drone pilot) and so found a fresh perspective. So well done. The things that I thought you achieved well were making your protag interesting and sympathetic. He's just a normal guy with an abnormal... read
  • A review of Bed In The Straw v2
    by eldave1 on 03/29/2014
    The author has a gift for dialogue. It is generally crisp, descriptive and in many cases clever. That is a good skill on which to build on. The structure of the screenplay really needs work. There are no definitive Acts, Plot Points or Catalysts for action (e.g., there needs to be a turning point that drives his desire to take on the mental health establishment, etc). It... read
  • A review of WITCHEVER
    by Casey Major-Lehto on 03/29/2014
    Catchy title! I wanted to get some more experience under my belt, so instead of waiting for more experienced screenplayer's to come my way through the assignment distributor I thought I should seek them from time to time. You were my first victim and this screenplay intrigued me. As an added bonus it is a collaborative piece with another experienced writer! A story about a... read
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