• A review of STARLETTE
    by rexb99 on 05/02/2014
    Well, you pretty well have it nailed there. Success in Hollywood isn't about the great intellectual tradition of the studio heads, the brilliance of casting directors or directors or even the abilities of actors themselves. It is all about being at the right place at the right (or wrong) time. 'Starlette' skims over events smoothly and we want to know more about how it all... read
  • A review of Aswang Abomination
    by love my craft on 05/02/2014
    The introduction instantly sucked me right into the world of the narrator. I remember thinking at a point while reading that I wanted to stop reading, but I kept going. Then I got to the point of, “This is really f*cking scary” when I got the part about the aswangs’ sounds that they make. That’s some scary… Anyways. And then how to kill them? So it goes from scary, to bada$$... read
  • A review of LOVE (re)CYCLE
    by InPost on 05/02/2014
    This is a really great short film. It plays as a very well thought out concept with a mature sense of film making. The content is disturbing but not gratuitous or crass, and I do like the acting. The characters are flushed out enough to get the point of what the film maker is trying to convey. NOW! Let me preface my following comments by saying that, I am assuming the creator... read
  • A review of The Last Thanksgiving
    by James Moriarty on 05/02/2014
    "Thanksgiving" is a real world experience. All readers know them. When an appliance breaks down, we call the REPAIRMAN. He examines the machine, orders a part and installs. Then a large labor + parts bill. But it's tough when it happens during the holidays. BLACKFORD tells this mundane, but real story. REAL PEOPLE. Good writing: "cancel hit." The writer, as many other writers... read
  • A review of Celebration
    by JakeFree on 05/02/2014
    I feel like there is a lot more to this story than what this site allows us to see with the 10 min time limit. I feel like this could be a great suspense story but for what we get the story is a little confusing. We don't fully understand the relationship between the characters and the past they have. I like the camera work in this and the lighting. It does a good job at setting... read
  • A review of Clickety Click
    by telliott on 05/02/2014
    With nearly 50 reviews on the story I will forego any mention of grammar, punctuation, spelling, word use (English vs. American) because I’m sure the writer has already heard them. This story is a snapshot of a family taking a snapshot. The use of the words whirring, clickety, etc, bring that home. Okay, I said I wouldn’t mention word use, but I was a bit confused by the... read
  • A review of House of Gates
    by **DELETED ACCOUNT** on 05/02/2014
    I like your style of writing. I felt like I was watching a 1940s horror classic. You managed to make what is essentially a novel and turn it into a screenplay. It is very hard to do by novelists. Because they’re two different animals, and the tone of the piece captures quite eloquently the Victorian Age. Nice opening hook. It’s based on real facts; people were afraid of being... read
  • by telliott on 05/02/2014
    I started to go through this story point for point but I think it would make for a better review to say that, while the writer has some good ideas, some of them need to go by the wayside to tell the real story that lies within. What story is at heart? I think the kidnapping at the beginning is just a vehicle for a much larger story. Therefore, the writer simply needs to... read
  • A review of After Birth Rev. 1
    by telliott on 05/02/2014
    I’ve heard stories and seen movies (THE MAGDALENE SISTERS) about what ‘wayward’ girls used to have to go through, but most often such scenarios were abroad. Kudos go to the writer for bringing this story to ink. It unfolds charmingly with descriptive passages and characters that could live next door to the reader. While I enjoyed reading this heart-tugger I think there are... read
  • A review of Fred of Wartsville
    by rexb99 on 05/03/2014
    I'm a little confused as to whether this story is intended for children or not. If so I would say the age appropriateness is about four. Children of all ages are very tough critics. A smart one--and they are all pretty smart--is going to say 'But the emeralds in King Thadeus' crown don't glisten because it's dark in Wartsville. NOTE: You don't need to say 'After that, the... read
  • WW2 Credited Review
    A review of 2000 Days
    by theauthor on 05/03/2014
    A fine work, very refined. You have assembled quite a story that details so much of the war of Germany and its atrocities. A family split but survives any way possible. There are a few areas of long dialogue that could be shortened. (page 7 - Are you a soldier? No, I'm a writer.)Who is the Adolf on page 37? Adolf Hitler? It was confusing to just see Adolf. (page 53 - Only John... read
  • by rexb99 on 05/03/2014
    This is a fragment of a screenplay, not a short story. (Pg. 1) How does the audience know what Tim is waiting for? (pg. 3 4/8) NOT A SENTENCE: 'they’re running their business they’ll be driven into the ground in a few weeks anyways. You should proof your work. There is a lot of punctuation missing. Not much here makes sense, but maybe that's the intention. Even in an absurdest... read
  • A review of Rats
    by micheleraedejean on 05/03/2014
    This story certainly had an unusual plot. A sleazy guy's dog accidentally gets poisoned and the owner takes revenge for it and then he od’s and the person who was responsible for the poisoning saves his life and the man turns his life around. The author calls the sleazy owner of the boat son of a bitch too many times, I got that the girl didn’t like him, calling him by the... read
  • by micheleraedejean on 05/03/2014
    I have been on a fishing boat when someone caught an octopus and it was pretty creepy watching it move around the bottom of the boat before it was finally freed from the line and thrown overboard. What a strange sight it would be to have one walk by you on land. I don’t remember that it moved with the great speed you imply here but I have to believe this must be somewhat of... read
  • A review of Hearing The Meat
    by johnregan on 05/03/2014
    Hearing The Meat -- review by John Regan Like the meat itself, this story is a good start with plenty of room to grow and expand. The writing mechanics are solid and it reads like an early draft that will just get better and better. Effective description of the plant, factory, your dual life, and Marjorie is slowly introduced to us, which I like. I like the duality of plant/plant... read
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