• A review of Wolflord
    by CAHabel3 on 05/25/2014
    Vivid, very dense and chock full of amazing action. I do enjoy a sword and sorcery tale now and then, but I did have a bit of difficulty following the plot. With tales like this, with all kinds of specific lore and medieval place names and unique character names, it's a bit difficult remembering who is who in the story. Much of the action blocks are beautifully written with... read
  • A review of Alone
    by Kezworth29 on 05/25/2014
    This was a great script to read! I was in suspense the whole way through and i think the story really resonates with me because it could actually happen. I really like the way you used simple yet very effective ways to keep the suspense going with the dark wood surrounding the house and the black out that happens towards the very beginning. I really liked John and Emma as... read
  • A review of The Zombie
    by Jack Meggers on 05/25/2014
    Here are my page-by-page notes for The Zombie: Numbers represent page where notes come from. 1. "What is "pretty"?" - Clearly stating one of the major themes of the piece. I was happy to have this right up front, but would have liked more scenes reinforcing this question. 6, 17. Mortgage.... OK, here's the first sign of something that provides Lyle's character with an active... read
  • A review of Curtains
    by telliott on 05/25/2014
    Reviewing perfection is not easy. I don’t know what to add, especially since this short story has already been published. I thought of making a joke and starting off by saying that this story sucks, it has no premise, the story line is nonexistent, the characters are wooden, etc. Further thinking led to the conclusion that such fine writing is unworthy of a joke. The writer... read
  • A review of There Is No Greece
    by tishanddavid on 05/26/2014
    Hi, Arin! Well, here is that long awaited review. Sorry that it took me AGES to get done. I sincerely hope you can forgive me for the overly long wait, it’s just that I found There Is No Greece to be so thought-provoking, that I needed time to digest it all. To make up for it, I’m going to make this review as worthwhile as possible. So here we go. What can I say?... read
  • A review of Sher Singh Rev.
    by **DELETED ACCOUNT** on 05/26/2014
    It’s apparent that the Writer put his heart and soul into this script. Sher Singh is a heartwarming story, but written in the narrative style of a novel. Not as a screenplay. I’ve read this twice without any significance between the two. It’s obvious, that the Writer’s first language isn’t English. That being said, I strongly recommend—that you have your screenplay edited by... read
  • A review of Wolflord
    by Melinda May on 05/26/2014
    “Wolflord,” an imaginative tale, plunges the reader into an alternative world that is fully developed and rich in its layers. The story centers around Arvaken, whose character is well drawn and engaging. Why does the Mounted Knight discard his crossbow (p. 4)? One can only presume weapons are dear in this world; is it meant to demonstrate the character's wastefulness?... read
  • A review of LOUD JACKET
    by theauthor on 05/26/2014
    This had an interesting angle, so I went for it. It was a bit unusual, but original in some ways. This has a good basic sense to it. However, it needs some re-tooling and some help. First, it is too long at 120 pages. I suggest cutting the first 60 into 30. Nothing happens in those pages except Paul get the jacket. I think it would also work better if Paul went inside to watch... read
  • A review of Reflections
    by micheleraedejean on 05/26/2014
    This is definitely an unusual story, a woman buys a mirror that shows an alternate reality and by seeing it she throws away a perfectly good relationship because she thinks she missed out on a classier life. I can’t see why anyone would want that? The writing is clear and the story is easy to follow and I found no mistakes which is always a good thing. Everyone’s future would... read
  • A review of Wolflord
    by Alan1980 on 05/26/2014
    Scott, Kudos on finishing your screenplay; we all know what a gruelling feat it can be to get the job done: to struggle and strive to tell that story that burns within us and to do it in such a way as to incur in us a sense of accomplishment at it. So well done. Having just read Wolflord, the very first thing i must point out to you, as reflected in the headline, is that... read
  • A review of The Zombie
    by mjelacic on 05/26/2014
    The beginning was very slow. I think you can find a quicker and more visual way to start the first act. I'd almost scrap all of act one and start the movie closer to the beginning of act two. His motivation for doing the interview could be as simple as wanting closure. Maybe instead of the "gone broke" route maybe he has a pshcologist that is his motivator. The pyschologist... read
  • A review of Alone
    by ronandrhon08 on 05/26/2014
    I enjoyed this read. It was clear and easy to understand. I'm assuming the writer is probably English. I was familiar with most of the foreign expressions and spelling he used, only one one or two did I look up. I would suggest he include descriptions of his characters. I found a couple of things that need corrected: Page 4. Scoffs his food, should be changed to scarfs... read
  • A review of Alone
    by Melinda May on 05/26/2014
    The psychological suspense thriller, “Alone,” moves quickly, with good pacing, engaging characters and interesting dialogue. Overall, a well written screenplay. Consider providing character descriptions when introducing the characters. Hanging up clothes outside (p.1) seems odd when a below-zero storm is moving in; it seems like it would be too cold to have clothes on... read
  • A review of The Tipping Game
    by Cab Coola on 05/26/2014
    A man makes his own salvation... with the help of others. I thought it was a terrific story. Just some good ole boys sharing their knowledge and life lessons. The structure was excellent and the imagery you wrote with was easy to picture. But the moral of the story was really what was interesting. Salvation. If everyone did a little more for the fellow man or woman how genuine... read
  • A review of Reeves Point
    by johnregan on 05/26/2014
    Reeves Point Review by John Regan I liked the story and reminded me some of The Others with a churchgoing twist. It had the theme of how you cannot escape your past and nobody gets off that easy. The writing is some of the best I have read on Trigger street. You also have an original voice and style. Perhaps integrate the job at Rite Aid a little more into the story... read