• A review of Last Visit-revision
    by hickok113 on 10/09/2014
    I thought the acting was good and the little actress playing "Amy" did very well. The floor creaking in the dark was nice and eerie . The first scare scene when the "Man" is now behind "Amy" startled the hell out of me, so that was well filmed and edited. For being about ten minutes, the time went fast and I didn't lose interest. I did think that the drawing of the "Man"... read
  • by matt r jones on 10/09/2014
    I reviewed another in the 'Meat Grinder' series a few days ago and commented on how the atmosphere and the writers voice didn't come through as well as it could. This tale, in my opinion, is so much better in those regards. The previous was kind of step by step story telling where as this was not. You let us imagine the reasons for what was happening and led us on a journey... read
  • A review of Monsters Inside
    by **DELETED ACCOUNT** on 10/09/2014
    Hi Johnny, Good writing, and an engaging story, plus the premise of “Monsters Inside” is quite interesting. It's largely about this relationship between Marla and Harold (what happens when a serial killer falls in love) which has nothing to do with Harold's killing, or the authorities' efforts to track Harold down. This perspective plays with the idea of a killer as both... read
  • by micheleraedejean on 10/09/2014
    The writing is decently done in this story but it is going to have a niche audience. I was born in a time when almost every legal and illegal drug known to man has been tried in (and I have tried many of them) and still I had trouble relating to this story. A drugged up woman, who is selling acid, sees a man with vague features and freaks out and describes her drug infused... read
  • A review of Hell Swallowed Whole
    by hickok113 on 10/09/2014
    I am a fan of movies with a lot of action in them. This one had one hell of a fight scene. I thought having the main character suffer from agoraphobia was a nice touch to keep her rooted to the house even though her life depended on leaving it. The detail in your writing was very good. The gore scenes with the dwarf are very detailed, as was everything else. The bathroom... read
  • A review of Monsters Inside
    by gromano on 10/10/2014
    I'll be completely honest. You have a great concept here and a good story, but it's kinda confusing at the beginning and the ending just kills all the build up you've created. Harold is the bad guy here, whether or not he thinks he's doing the right thing, and he's the one who should die. It seems like you're killing off Marla's parents to allow an unestablished, underdeveloped... read
  • by Russ2007 on 10/10/2014
    OPENING TWENTY FIVE PAGES: Questions you need to ask yourself: Do they establish the tone of the story? Do they set up the world this story is set in? Do these opening scenes hook and draw the reader into the world the characters live in? Are the opening pages written cleanly, efficiently and easy to follow? Are the character introductions long winded? STORY / PLOT: Is... read
  • A review of Only When I Dream
    by matt r jones on 10/10/2014
    First off, I love the idea of the story. A guy who lives in his dreams and can take others for the ride, brilliant. I'll just go over the parts that felt a little off to me, there's not many. Not sure the child would say 'viewing' on P2, would probably say watched going on his other speech. Seems odd that he would say about having the same dreams as Mara straight away when... read
  • by theauthor on 10/10/2014
    A story about a bunch of hillbillies. You seemed to have a clear vision of your story and the storyline. I understand having the characters speak 'hillbilly' but the narration should be straight out with good grammar. If we know the character is Southern or Northern Mass, we can already picture how he talks without the twisted grammar. I would suggest cleaning up the dialogue... read
  • A review of The Good Guys
    by Bill Albert Author on 10/10/2014
    When I watched it the first time it seemed like simple, well executed idea. Then I watched it a second time, and a third, and each time I did I liked it more and more. There is so much more going on here than you think at first glance and it isn't quite clear who The Good Guys are supposed to be. It's us or them feel is really interesting at the beginning but, after several... read
  • A review of The Black Hole
    by micheleraedejean on 10/10/2014
    The concept of this story reminded me of Carrie and that's not a bad thing. The story was easy to follow and read. The description of Leigh disappearing into the black hole was written in a way that came off kind of humorous but I don’t know if that’s what the author was going for. It’s kind of a wordy jump from Leigh getting sucked up and then the description of what happened... read
  • by cmcloughlin1218 on 10/10/2014
    This story is very well written. The description at the beginning is inviting and we get to know the protagonist quickly. The characters are okay, I would like to know a little bit more about their back story and how they became the way they are. I did not expect the ending, it was an interesting twist. I read the last two pages at least three times until I got the gist. I... read
  • by cmcloughlin1218 on 10/10/2014
    This was a great read. I'm used to all the drama, horror and psychological stories here on trigger street. We don't get enough straight forward humor. This is a screwed up story about an evil man whore that puts his cock wherever feels the best, and why not? If I was a shallow guy that had no scruples I would do the same. I think it comes down to this, we are all envious of... read
  • A review of Haiku + 1
    by Bill Albert Author on 10/11/2014
    A fun, light-hearted film about a guy who says the wrong thing to his girlfriend. Not like anyone else has ever been there. It's a fast paced, entertaining film that lots of people can connect to. I especially liked the editing creating a steady pace without going to slow or over the top. That is harder to achieve than you'd think. Well done.
  • by theauthor on 10/11/2014
    This was an interesting tale of two lesbians who meet for the first time. One too shy to admit it, the other bold but doesn't really express herself either. Two grammar issues, nothing overly important. The problem is the dialogue is a bit too direct for a first meeting. It should be shorter sentences. Also, there is no action or continuation. The main girl doesn't do more... read