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A poetic view of the homeless

A review of Shelter by the Sea

by Phil121 on 01/23/2013

Shelter by the sea looks on how it feels to be a homeless person. I think The film is shot very well for the most part. However, I was confused when there was a transition to a short slideshow of images instead of video, I felt that this took away from the flow of the film, why couldn't the director have filmed these scenes? Nevertheless, others may react differently to this,... Shelter by the sea looks on how it feels to be a homeless person. I think The film is shot very well for the most part. However, I was confused when there was a transition to a short slideshow of images instead of video, I felt that this took away from the flow of the film, why couldn't the director have filmed these scenes? Nevertheless, others may react differently to this, but for me it just didn't work. The story is incredibly simple, but works incredibly well. The narrator did a great job conveying story information and letting us get into the head of the homeless man.
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CONFUSING

A review of Dark Places in the Sunshine

by Phil121 on 01/23/2013

I just didn't understand this one. Up until the 4.00 minute mark I thought the film was rather slow, then it seemed as if the film was going to get quite exciting. However, the murder scene involving the stalker and the lady's husband was incredibly 'stiff'. Im not sure whether this was the directors decision, or just poor acting. It appeared as if the husband didn't realise... I just didn't understand this one. Up until the 4.00 minute mark I thought the film was rather slow, then it seemed as if the film was going to get quite exciting. However, the murder scene involving the stalker and the lady's husband was incredibly 'stiff'. Im not sure whether this was the directors decision, or just poor acting. It appeared as if the husband didn't realise the stalker was even there. After this was when i started to get confused. The blend of black and white + colour scenes suggested two seperate stories, but I couldn't follow either of them. I'm sure this film could have been a lot better if the story was told in a much simpler way.

-A decent attempt at creating an artistic love story, but it falls flat when trying to convey story information and understanding. read

Blind fo' sho'

A review of The Blind

by QUTEKALE on 01/23/2013

How do I start? I am not sure where to start. I see that you were trying to get some type of feel with dark coloring of the film, You created some type of mood but I didn't fall for it. I can't say I dislike this short, I just didn't quite understand where you were going with this. Was the guy blind and this was all in his mind or did this short have something to do with... How do I start? I am not sure where to start. I see that you were trying to get some type of feel with dark coloring of the film, You created some type of mood but I didn't fall for it. I can't say I dislike this short, I just didn't quite understand where you were going with this. Was the guy blind and this was all in his mind or did this short have something to do with the blinds? I assume you were adding humor with the guy looking out the window and the other guy being a court jester in the other window. I viewed it twice but fell into the same mind frame, what is this short about? I know you have some talent behind you I just think to get your message across it needs to be a little more obvious for us idiots. read

Snappy

A review of snapped

by burgos387 on 01/23/2013

Jeff you did a wonderful job on this short. The photography on this short was incredible and simple. Each frame told the story of love, deception and betrayal. Though we didn't see who the wife was with, that caused our hero to lose it, you knew it was wrong. Though I would have preferred to see what was that extent of the sin. The acting was very effective, especially without... Jeff you did a wonderful job on this short. The photography on this short was incredible and simple. Each frame told the story of love, deception and betrayal. Though we didn't see who the wife was with, that caused our hero to lose it, you knew it was wrong. Though I would have preferred to see what was that extent of the sin. The acting was very effective, especially without dialouge. I liked that during the close up on the eyes, you saw a reflection of what they saw. I'm not certain though if he shot her, or was he still trying to figure what to do. Well done. read

Pumpkins.....ugh

A review of The Carved Pumpkin

by QUTEKALE on 01/23/2013

How do I begin? I thought this short was interesting. The graphics were truly on point. This felt like it should have been a horror story. I'm watching films in a basement and kept looking over my shoulder expecting something, anything to jump out at me. I felt the suspense lingering. I've never carved a pumpkin before but I seem to be looking forward to it now. I thought... How do I begin? I thought this short was interesting. The graphics were truly on point. This felt like it should have been a horror story. I'm watching films in a basement and kept looking over my shoulder expecting something, anything to jump out at me. I felt the suspense lingering. I've never carved a pumpkin before but I seem to be looking forward to it now. I thought the short was well put together. The ending was some what expected but in the same enjoyable to watch you develop the ending. Kudos. read

Shall Pass

A review of Shall come to pass

by burgos387 on 01/23/2013

I don't know how I feel about this film. There were certain things that were done well. The acting was good, some of the photography worked effectively. I wasn't clear about which woman the hero woke up to. His wife, or the hooker. The fact that she vanished in what I gather was the rapture would mean it's his wife.Or was it the hooker, a twist on who might be worthy to be... I don't know how I feel about this film. There were certain things that were done well. The acting was good, some of the photography worked effectively. I wasn't clear about which woman the hero woke up to. His wife, or the hooker. The fact that she vanished in what I gather was the rapture would mean it's his wife.Or was it the hooker, a twist on who might be worthy to be saved. After all Mary Magdalen was supposed to orginally to be a lady of the evening abd she was saved. My major problem with the film is that in my mind, this was religious propaganda. Which is my pet peeve. In the fufure you might want make the piece more character driven situation, then message driven. read

Review

A review of Comet (v2)

by hepwa on 01/23/2013

Poetry and the cosmos go hand in hand and I actually found myself thinking about what the narrator had to say and quickly. Because at first, I was my cynical self thinking "there's no narrative here, no storyline..." but in the end it is what it is and I have to give the maker high marks for creativity and helping us think about a subject outside of scientific and spiritual... Poetry and the cosmos go hand in hand and I actually found myself thinking about what the narrator had to say and quickly. Because at first, I was my cynical self thinking "there's no narrative here, no storyline..." but in the end it is what it is and I have to give the maker high marks for creativity and helping us think about a subject outside of scientific and spiritual terms. You made me think of space in poetic terms and that was lovely. The narrator was an interesting character and didn't have to push so hard in his speech and mannerisms; could've had the same effect just being himself. Overall, I'm glad I was assigned this, a quick, interesting watch with a lot of real work put into it. Kudos read

They came from the stars

A review of They Came From The Stars

by Phil121 on 01/24/2013

They Came From The Stars is a fun short film. The story is simple and comedic. Personally, i don't think i have seen any 1950's UFO movies, but i can imagine how they would be quite similar to this (in a good way). The acting isn't great, ( i felt that this was intended ) but this adds to the overall comedic value. The use of black and white gave the film a nice old school... They Came From The Stars is a fun short film. The story is simple and comedic. Personally, i don't think i have seen any 1950's UFO movies, but i can imagine how they would be quite similar to this (in a good way). The acting isn't great, ( i felt that this was intended ) but this adds to the overall comedic value. The use of black and white gave the film a nice old school look which went well with its genre.

Overall-A funny piece of film with very few flaws. read

Young Mans Great Adventure

A review of Young Man's Great Adventure

by Phil121 on 01/24/2013

This is quite difficult to review, the video is good for what it is. But to call it a "film" i think it requires a bit more in terms of conveying story information. I can not doubt the efforts of the singer in this piece. However, i found myself being drawn out of the story and just hearing music. As a result, the video ended with me not really knowing what occurred in... This is quite difficult to review, the video is good for what it is. But to call it a "film" i think it requires a bit more in terms of conveying story information. I can not doubt the efforts of the singer in this piece. However, i found myself being drawn out of the story and just hearing music. As a result, the video ended with me not really knowing what occurred in the this great adventure.

Verdict - good song - ok "film" read

Sun

A review of Sunset

by burgos387 on 01/24/2013

This was a sweet film. Innocent in it's presentation and sweet in story. A guy and girl meet and seem to form a relationship. The acting was good, being a silent actor is tough, and the cast performed without obstacles. Never stooping to indication, to get their point across, they just focused on living moment to moment. The use of black and white was clever. (I'm a sucka for... This was a sweet film. Innocent in it's presentation and sweet in story. A guy and girl meet and seem to form a relationship. The acting was good, being a silent actor is tough, and the cast performed without obstacles. Never stooping to indication, to get their point across, they just focused on living moment to moment. The use of black and white was clever. (I'm a sucka for black and white). Overall an enjoyable piece. read

Big

A review of Big Big Boy

by burgos387 on 01/24/2013

If you wait long enough on Triggerstreet, you get another Elmer Lang production. God you are tall. Though I didn't need to see you in your undies, we got the point that your a big boy. I liked the use of still photography to tell your story. I also liked the original song you wrote. Your a very talented person. I gather at the end of the film, because your alone, in the only... If you wait long enough on Triggerstreet, you get another Elmer Lang production. God you are tall. Though I didn't need to see you in your undies, we got the point that your a big boy. I liked the use of still photography to tell your story. I also liked the original song you wrote. Your a very talented person. I gather at the end of the film, because your alone, in the only video part of this short, that she left you. Sorry for your lost. read

Can't see

A review of Lost in Civilization

by burgos387 on 01/24/2013

This is another Triggerstreet video that I can't view. If was taken away by the user. I also see that it's being reviewed by the hall of justice. So why was it given to me as an assignment. To clutter up my assignment review. Please triggerstreet get it together with the assingment department. Don't give me stuff I can't view.

Enjoyed.

A review of Blocked

by mmccarrell on 01/24/2013

I liked the angles, and the black and white theme was excellent for this film. The hero had a mysterious charisma that kept me watching, he was very likable. The only thing I didn't understand was why the girl took the pendant in the end. Overall, great flick. Great use of camera angles and proper music for the theme of the movie.

Nothing

A review of Little Boba

by burgos387 on 01/24/2013

This is another Triggerstreet video that I can't view. If was taken away by the user. I also see that it's being reviewed by the hall of justice. So why was it given to me as an assignment. To clutter up my assignment review. Please triggerstreet get it together with the assingment department. Don't give me stuff I can't view.

Little Things

A review of All Those Little Things

by burgos387 on 01/24/2013

A good film. I liked the two guys discussing mundane subjects like the fathers, while they are obviously in a life and death situation. The more they duscuss the mundane the more dangerous the situation must be, since not once did they talk about what brought them to this situation. The other thing that I really liked was how we found out the other man was mortally wounded... A good film. I liked the two guys discussing mundane subjects like the fathers, while they are obviously in a life and death situation. The more they duscuss the mundane the more dangerous the situation must be, since not once did they talk about what brought them to this situation. The other thing that I really liked was how we found out the other man was mortally wounded and I gather he died at the end. Gppd work. read

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