"Life can’t defeat a writer who is in love with writing, for life itself is a writer’s lover until death."

- Edna Ferber

Reviews

  • A review of THRONE OF THE DAMNED
    by rexb99 on 04/28/2014
    This story is reminiscent of a lot of the first person sword and fantasy video games I've enjoyed. You, Hans Drenden, are alone facing the entrance to unknown horrors - unarmed but for a magic scroll. Great, I'll play. Question: Can one visualize courage, or would this be the violence often associated with courage? Wouldn't it be 'He stood tall and stared unblinkingly at... read
  • A review of Candlestick
    by rexb99 on 04/28/2014
    No punctuation in opening sentence put me off momentarily, but don't take that as gospel; I have a real problem myself with the placement of unnecessary commas. :-\ That the main character was 'driving too fast' in the opening seems irrelevant. After this I became so caught up in the atmosphere that I was unable to spot any errors. This story has a real ring of truth... read
  • A review of What Are Friends For?
    by micheleraedejean on 04/28/2014
    Friends don’t let friends: drive drunk; drink alone; party alone; smoke or rob banks. We are told in the beginning of the story that these two guys have known each other for about six years and that they aren’t really that close which became obvious when the ending was revealed. A guy gets a call from friend to go out to breakfast and for much of the time he worries about whether... read
  • by micheleraedejean on 04/28/2014
    I realize this was supposed to be humorous but it wasn’t as funny as it could have been. What was the tattoo that this person got? There must be some kind on indoctrination speech you get from the tattoo artist before you hop up to the chair that would be scary. I wasn’t emotionally pulled into this story. It was told in too light and superficial of a manner with not enough... read
  • by telliott on 04/28/2014
    Frank, the main character in Conversations in a Hearse, is a cab driver at first. Passengers are a problem so now he drives a hearse because dead people don’t talk. Or do they? This story takes the reader for a ride that is one well worth being a ‘back seat driver’ for. The language used by the writer suits the story and creates a visual of a lonely man driving at night... read
  • A review of CancerRocksNow
    by telliott on 04/28/2014
    I truly appreciate the writer's innovative approach to story-telling but I don't know what to review. Cutting and pasting techniques? I have no idea as to what the writer can actually write. I'm at a loss on this story. There is no coherent story to review. I think innovation could be better served in another way other than taking words from three different novels and... read
  • by writer546 on 04/28/2014
    You definitely have a great concept for a short story. The out of body experience could be a very vivid and compelling piece. But as it is currently presented, this is more of a lecture then a true story. If you do want to make it a story then you should concentrate on the experience. Expand the whole build up to and experience of the out of body experience. The story... read
  • A review of A Dangerous Mind
    by telliott on 04/28/2014
    A DANGEROUS MIND is a chilling tale of the workings of a psychopath’s mind, which can be dangerous territory. The story is intellectually over my head but to me it screams psychopathic killer, given the twist at the end. How do I review perfection? The writer has undoubtedly heard of any errors in grammar, punctuation, spelling, etc, by now so I will forego them, though... read
  • A review of Smothered
    by rexb99 on 04/29/2014
    Something odd here. Atmospheric descriptions seem disconnected from the actions and dialogue. Though I cannot figure out exactly why that is. Could be because of placement. The descriptions appear to be important when it is the dialogue following that is crucial. e.g. 'Beneath grey clouds a white sheet billowed out on a washing line. Una glared at Helen with her arms crossed... read
  • A review of Restoration
    by telliott on 04/29/2014
    A presumably divorced man works on his garden yet he is also working on himself. As a man. As a husband. And as a father. Nice touch. The work on the yard and garden is the man not only physically toiling but mentally and emotionally working within himself as well. I thought the clichés were a bit much but then I thought, How would a real person put it? Silence, as... read
  • A review of Quantum Effects
    by James Moriarty on 05/01/2014
    QUANTUM = Nice fast story on how REX is learning science at the high school level. Rex can write clean and neat, and shows the ambiguity of the scientific method...but it works when other scientists replicate results in their labs. LINUS PAULING thought that DNA was a triple helix, but WATSON and CRICK + ROSIE, based on hard data, and assembling models of data, concluded it... read
  • A review of FIN Part 1
    by James Moriarty on 05/01/2014
    O.K. Garry, you got me. #1 Your story is grammatical correct. #2 You build tension with a killer lurking in the background. #3 Best dialogue that I have read on TS.com. There may be a killer, but the protagonist has 9mm gun. Good writing: "That would be me." "...but I know every noise now." "They have whiskey." Fin = Final = a latin derivative Please ask TS.com to assign... read
  • by telliott on 05/01/2014
    Having read THE WRATH OF HEAVEN I'm still not sure what I read. Makes me unsure of any review I can give it. I believe this is the second story I have read by this same writer. I didn't get the first one either. I didn't feel any emotional attachment to the main character. The formatting of the story, to include the use of different fonts, was confusing. Text messages... read
  • by rexb99 on 05/01/2014
    Okay, now I'm confused. The Sage of the Full Moon, which I reviewed last week or so, was obviously written in response to criticism to this story 'Farmer's Fury, King's Folly'. Or maybe you have developed two completely different versions, perhaps 'Farmer's Fury, King's Folly' is meant to be a flash fiction piece for submission elsewhere. The characters here aren't developed... read
  • A review of Bank Robbah
    by micheleraedejean on 05/01/2014
    This tale was left dangling in midair. A bank robber doesn’t feel like he should be a father because of his profession but isn’t it a little late to decide that after the woman is pregnant? The story really jumps around and could use some continuity. The concept is decent but the story didn’t really illustrate that point as well as it could have. There wasn’t enough detail... read
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