Review of: Harmony 

reviewed by Justwriting on 02/22/2011
Credited Review
A good story in need of some polish Credited Review
There is an interesting story buried in here.

The story begins with sections of narration and dialog created to provide the reader with a lot of back-story information. The story takes on life once the terrorists douse David in water. From this point onward I found the images clear and the dialog more natural and convincing. A lot of the back-story information isn’t necessary for the reader to understand the story. The information that is important can be included during David’s conversations with the terrorists.

With some polishing this could be a nice story. Thanks for the opportunity to read it.

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