Review of: Reflections 

reviewed by **DELETED ACCOUNT** on 09/19/2011
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Okay let's be honest I started the story and caught all the mirror stuff and my stomach started to sink. We've seen stories like this before - right? Wrong - this was a beautifully executed short story. The subject matter was perfect for the medium and I know I go on about stories getting made into movies but this would make a great short. I couldn't see where the story was going which is always a good thing. It grew in intensity and then became dark which came as a surprise. I'm glad that Ryan turned up at the end - it is a fairy story after all.

If I had one down point - it would be to loosen up the prose - this is a young girl with a zest for life and yet some of the language feels as if it's written by an old aunt. It is all there but just a pinch more zest (if this makes any sense) and it would be perfect.

Lovely stuff and yes I guess it is better to reflect than regret.

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