The structure of this story is different, and at first, it threw me off. It was more a list of memories than a story. It wasn't until the end, the last paragraph, that I got an idea why the writer chose this style. The story is brief and powerful, but I'm not sure what to say about it.
I'm reflecting on the message and the structure that was used. I'm not sure if telling the story with characters, dialog, and showing his struggle through actions would better suit the message. As it is, the story touched my heart, but I lost my grandfather to Alzheimer's. So, I'm going to be more sensitive to the issue. However, someone else may be impacted more if you were to write this with a more recognizable design. That's purely speculative and maybe the way you have written it makes the story stand out more? How confusing is that? Sorry, I'm not more helpful.
Overall, I liked the story. I think the initial confusion at the structure actually adds to the message. It may be that the one telling the story, the main character, is having trouble writing the story due to the alzheimer's and is just trying to get his memories down on paper. Well, as you can see, this story's style stumped me a little, but why should they all be written the same?
Review of: Memories
reviewed by Suesea on 10/05/2010
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