I'm really not sure what to say, about this one. I have a taste for black comedy, so the sardonic wit you display here appealed to me, of course. It's definitely good to see a story about a slacker chauffeur and a high-class hooker that isn't vulgar or a wannabe porno, and manages to keep you from thinking it could ever be either of those things. You even handled the barking scene in a way that was cute and funny, while other writers could have just made that part sleazy.
I think my only complaint is that some parts could perhaps be a little tighter, but it's not a major problem by any means. You've done another good one.
Review of: The Car and Candice
reviewed by sibryce on 11/19/2010
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