Other Reviews by JLVDP 28

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  Always worth trying
  A review of Till Death Do Us Part
  by JLVDP on 12/21/2011
  A film is always worth respect because it requires so much work. It is always difficult to pull through a project a bit too big. This film is unfortunately too amateurish. The framing is not always good, the cutting inadequate, the production values minimal. The story itself would have worked better had it been trimmed and further reworked. The actors do their best and the... A film is always worth respect because it requires so much work. It is always difficult to pull through a project a bit too big. This film is unfortunately too amateurish. The framing is not always good, the cutting inadequate, the production values minimal. The story itself would have worked better had it been trimmed and further reworked. The actors do their best and the 2 older protagonists are doing ok. The younger actress has less moments. All these aspects could have used more preparation work. It takes time to make a good movie, even a short, and this one seems to have been rushed. read
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  Shooting in your own foot
  A review of Neggy Meets Sammy
  by JLVDP on 12/09/2011
  I like the overall message of this piece. But I am less comfortable with the way it is put together. First, the non-stop voice over makes it difficult to get in the story. The redundancy in the text can be interesting but here, combined with the relatively lowly interesting visuals, it makes the whole short painful to go through. The redundancy is of course related to the theme... I like the overall message of this piece. But I am less comfortable with the way it is put together. First, the non-stop voice over makes it difficult to get in the story. The redundancy in the text can be interesting but here, combined with the relatively lowly interesting visuals, it makes the whole short painful to go through. The redundancy is of course related to the theme of the story. One can feel a lot of thought behind this story. But it is difficult to make a story about boredom and make it pleasing, especially if you cover sound by a non-stop, repetitive voice-over and at the same time translate boredom with on-purpose rather dull visuals.
  
  The message could have been conveyed through more actions, more visuals, and let the viewer make his own way into the story. read
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  Atmosfear ?
  A review of The Doll (2nd Draft)
  by JLVDP on 12/09/2011
  I like this type of very short stories built around a classic horror theme. I think this story can become more interesting with more work on both characters and atmosphere. I believe that with a more thoughtful choice of words, the amosphere can be made more interesting. The story needn't be much longer but needs reworking. That takes time and many attempts. At this time the... I like this type of very short stories built around a classic horror theme. I think this story can become more interesting with more work on both characters and atmosphere. I believe that with a more thoughtful choice of words, the amosphere can be made more interesting. The story needn't be much longer but needs reworking. That takes time and many attempts. At this time the story is still rough and obvious. The moment the evil comes could be delivered less obviously. The character of the girl needs work so that the reader can care more for her. At the moment she witnesses the story and allows us to see it through her eyes but we don't get to actually feel for her.
  
  More work needed, but this story will work. read