I really enjoyed the screenplay! Every page, I was excited for more. The
narative was exactly brand new but that is the case with most of them.
I'm not sure if this is a compliment or an insult but I found myself laughing
and entertained more by your descriptions than anything else! The tome was
excellent. I really felt comfortable with the story, again, being a thriller
horror, I'm not sure if that's good or bad.
I did though feel that the ending wasn't satifsfying. For a disease that has
crossed oceans and seems unstoppable, I would have like a less specific
conclusion. One that would tie in the vast numbers of people affected and infected.
All-in-all, great job!
Review of: Hunger
reviewed by uLindokuhle on 08/27/2011
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