A Touch Of Evil
Interesting short with very nice angles, shot compositions, & use of locations. I really like the shots inside the car of the London Underground. Nice work. The story moved a little slow, & would like to see more anxiety w/ the character to justify his actions (in cinematic terms). W/out being melodramatic, we need to see more of a sense of urgency. Why does he owe the money? What are the consequences--other than the obvious? I like the way you use the newspaper clipping, & the shot of the character holding the gun to wrap up the story. It is a nice twist, & although not original, originally done. The music works well for the most part. Nice job & good luck.
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