I like the premise of this movie - a gang that steal a lot of money, get robbed in turn, and then have to try and get it in order to return it to avoid worse trouble. It's a great plot and one that you could have a lot of fun with.
Regarding the characters, I thought the main ones all spoke with too similtar voices. When I covered over the name and just read the speech I couldn't work out which characters were speaking.
The comedy wasn't that funny for me, but maybe that's just a different sense of humour.
I thought there was too much speech in some places. I would really have liked to have less talk and more plot twists and turns instead. It is the plot that makes this movie and you could make more out of it.
I think you could have made more of the relationship between Sonya and Profit. Sonya is clearly a strong character but plays only a bit part at the moment. It's a B plot that could be funny and interesting.
These were my thoughts, good luck with it.
Review of: Ah-Ha
reviewed by OliRichards on 02/18/2012
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