Review of: Crocodile Tears
reviewed by rmahler on 11/29/2008
Okay, this review is going to seem almost contradictory, but here goes...Sometimes yout don't have enough faith in our dialogue. You could strip away the italics and quotes and underlines and parentheticals in almost every instance and the script would be cleaner, and it would help the flow. You HAVE TO trust the intelligence of your reader to get it sometimes. The flip side of that is that you rely very heavily on dialog, forgetting that screenplays are a visual medium. Don't get me wrong. Some of your dialog is very clever, and worthy of a feature film, but often this script is just too talky. You need to find ways to make this script more visual. Also, you need to help the reader by making the characters more distinct. If I always have to look at the name to know who's speaking, that means your characters are running together. You have some very good ideas here, a decent set of characters, but often you sink into cliche and many of your scenes indicate that you can rise above that. Work on a rewrite (I know how hard that is, believe me) and bring this up to the next level.
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