Review of: The Wrong Day
reviewed by **DELETED ACCOUNT** on 12/11/2011
“The Wrong Day“ is definitely the right title for this vignette. It is entertaining and amusing and you can really relate to some of the Murphy’s Law things that happen to the main character. I think, though, this would be a much better story if it were longer. There is much more that the author could do with the character, although the ending does tie up one loose end. At times too the writing is jumpy. Good luck!
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