Other Reviews by dial_revenge 6

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  Everything you'd want from a western. I loved it.
  A review of Forsaken (rev.)
  by dial_revenge on 07/24/2009
  Forsaken by Jose L. Villanueva, focuses on Kal Stanton, a rugged, match-chewing bounty hunter and his journey to avenge the death of his sister and her family in the old west. From the off, this screenplay totally gripped me. The dialogue was understated, almost minimal, which complemented the 'ghost town' feel of the place. The descriptive writing was clear and vivid and... Forsaken by Jose L. Villanueva, focuses on Kal Stanton, a rugged, match-chewing bounty hunter and his journey to avenge the death of his sister and her family in the old west.
  
  From the off, this screenplay totally gripped me. The dialogue was understated, almost minimal, which complemented the 'ghost town' feel of the place. The descriptive writing was clear and vivid and the writer didn't feel the need to describe everything in complex detail. Once we were presented with an image, we were moved on to the next. This kept the pace steady and consistent. Even the gun play seemed matter of fact and almost still. The writer managed to present the idea that Stanton blew people away all the time. It was his job. Mundane almost. This tone was kept throughout and it worked on almost every level.
  Every character was fully realised and we knew who we were rooting for and who we wanted to see get their retribution.
  I wouldn't alter anything about this screenplay and I'd definitely go and see this at the cinema. read
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  Elegantly written, failed to deliver a premise.
  A review of Tangale's Peak
  by dial_revenge on 07/15/2009
  Abdullah M. Audu's 'Tangale's Peak' is a drama set in eleventh century Nigeria focusing on twin brothers, soon to be heirs of the LATIGRAN'S throne. A subject/period I had little prior knowledge of. I was intrigued by the idea that this script could transport me to a world I had never entertained in fiction or history and excited me greatly that I might learn something in the... Abdullah M. Audu's 'Tangale's Peak' is a drama set in eleventh century Nigeria focusing on twin brothers, soon to be heirs of the LATIGRAN'S throne. A subject/period I had little prior knowledge of. I was intrigued by the idea that this script could transport me to a world I had never entertained in fiction or history and excited me greatly that I might learn something in the process.
  
  After getting past the (at times) very confusing names of all of the characters; (AFIRUWA, ALTINE NGALIRGO, HABILA,) I realised after page 30, M. Audu had deviated somewhat from the three act structure. This is fine, rules are definitely there to be broken, the problem lies in the fact that unfortunately there WAS no apparent structure. I was left waiting in anticipation for some sort of premise to kick in, but it never happened.
  
  For me, if no dilemma is presented in the first twenty minutes, I find my attention span drifting. Unfortunately, this was the case. The next hour of the screenplay dragged it's heels and I unfortunately found the second act to be a very long, drawn out affair.
  It did pick up pace toward the end though and I felt that this was the act that definitely worked. It was punchier and stepped up a gear. Also, I got a definite sense of 'place'; the dry, cracked deserts, the two thousand warriors charging down the shuro hillside. The writing was descriptive and rich. The dialogue on the other hand was clumsy and at times very cliché.
  Ultimately, it was a case of 'too little too late'. If only the opening was as compelling as the ending, I feel it would have been a different film altogether. That's said, this is a screenplay that I felt was fulfilling at times, although it won't be one that I will be returning to. read