At the beginning I found the jumps from time period to time period a little chaotic and annoying. Once I got into the screenplay however the transitions became smoother. The script is well written. I found the dialogue a little stilted in places but overall not too bad.
The scenes of Tom and Neil in prison together seemed a little improbable, at least to me. Here is this violent felon opening himself up to an absolute stranger, probably the only way he'll get his misery off his chest. I was waiting the whole time for Neil to start wailing on Tom and was surprised that it didn't happen.
I'd also like to point out that in the prison scenes Neil does inform Tom about the sticks. If Tom remembers Neil from this small encounter, why not the gist of their conversation? It's obvious Neil's brother died a horrendous death, I'd think details of that would stick in Tom's mind.
And where did Neil get the idea Tom is actually David? What proof did he have? I must've missed the part when he had a reason to come knocking on Tom's door. Plus at the end we never really find out if Tom IS David. That was a little disappointing. It's all conjecture.
Otherwise I thought the script was well written and it did hold my interest all the way through. A definite good effort. I'd like to read more from this writer.
Review of: Grace and Consistency
reviewed by email@example.com on 08/08/2011
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