What a good read! This is probably going to be my worst review ever because I really don’t have much to criticize. I was smiling the whole time I read this story. You established your characters well and they seemed very real. After just a little back story we were all along for the ride and what a ride it was. I couldn’t believe the whole story was about a limo ride to the airport. It read so fast and so easily. It was a pleasure to read.
The only way I could see to improve this story is the opening paragraph. It doesn’t really grab you. It doesn’t do justice to the rest of the story. Maybe something with a little more hook? But other than that great story. Keep it up.
Review of: Flight 18 (revised)
reviewed by Fitzufilms on 06/10/2011
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