Review of: Annotated Edition 

reviewed by danjama on 04/28/2010
Credited Review
danjama
Brilliant. Credited Review
I honestly don't think I can say anything that will improve this short story.

It was polluted with too much dialogue, but my criticism is diluted and unimportant as this is acknowledged in the story itself. That was my only gripe. Too much dialogue is boring and tedious.

However, I loved this short story. It's funny, edgy and clever. The notes were a particular source of amusement.

It's nice to read something a little different, that doesn't take itself so seriously.

Well done. I wish I could offer some improvements, but there are none that I can think of.

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