I’ve studied native American lore and culture quite a bit having a little blood in me. The Rez provided a facet of light into the stress brought to a people engulfed by a culture which goes out of its way to demean, marginalize, patronize and dispirit them.
Focusing on the patronization between an owned and disowned son provides an emotional core with great resonance.
This well written SP, though fast paced, achieves a depth that is quite impressive. The flashback, an often weak device, is well used and informative. The dialogue rings true; the understanding of the culture, authentic.
One item to look at might be the character of Simon. I realize you may want his motivations to initially prove enigmatic, but there needs to be, perhaps, greater clarity regarding his motivations in the end
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