Iíve studied native American lore and culture quite a bit having a little blood in me. The Rez provided a facet of light into the stress brought to a people engulfed by a culture which goes out of its way to demean, marginalize, patronize and dispirit them.
Focusing on the patronization between an owned and disowned son provides an emotional core with great resonance.
This well written SP, though fast paced, achieves a depth that is quite impressive. The flashback, an often weak device, is well used and informative. The dialogue rings true; the understanding of the culture, authentic.
One item to look at might be the character of Simon. I realize you may want his motivations to initially prove enigmatic, but there needs to be, perhaps, greater clarity regarding his motivations in the end
Review of: Blood Brothers
reviewed by **DELETED ACCOUNT** on 07/04/2007
Other Reviews by **DELETED ACCOUNT** 3429
A review of Born Againby **DELETED ACCOUNT** on 04/15/2014This script was a good read and I enjoyed the writerís work in the scenes. Dialogue is funny and entertaining, although there are a few bits where you could trim some unnecessary lines (Example: on page 67 we donít need Maya stating that they heard a gunshot, Toddís funny question was enough). The vast majority of characters were well fleshed-out. Carter and Todd are two... read
A review of Red, White and Goal!!!by **DELETED ACCOUNT** on 04/13/2014This script has a great concept and great market appeal: Americans would be curious to see a flick about the national selection and the rest of the world actually cares about soccer. My problem with this script was with your choice of development. You tagged it as a comedy, but it is instead a sports drama (not a problem, as long as you are sure about the genre you are dealing... read
A review of Marcus Lotharioby **DELETED ACCOUNT** on 04/12/2014Low-concept pieces like this one are quite challenging, since they require great work on character and dialogue as a way to compensate the lack of plot. I am afraid that, so far, this script didn't do a good job in either of those. Marcus is selfish and unlikable, but he lacks a redeeming quality that could compensate such flaws (Llewyn Davis, for example, is infused with humanity... read