The story has an authentic feel and the characters are interesting. In a backwoods way, they are charming.
I enjoyed your sense of humor and descriptions. This has been up on TS for a while, so I'm sure people have already pointed out areas that need fixed as far as grammar and typos. As it is, it needs an editing pass, butI thought it was fun to read. I'd like to read more of your stories.
The story has heart and is rich in its simplicity. Thanks for sharing it.
Review of: Mule Training
reviewed by Suesea on 09/17/2010
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