To begin, I found your script to be wonderfully entertaining. It was bright and quick and I never felt like I was reading multiple movies. You had a great sense of what "Demon Hustler." With that being said I believe there is more room to explore Cody. I would have liked to have seen a little more of the con-man in the beginning. Seeing more of Cody's redeemable qualities would have made his switch a lot more clear.
Heroes and villains can be very similar and in this story it would have been exciting to see the half demon side of Cody. Maybe moments where he needs to be restrained because he is unable to control himself in certain situations I.e. Odyssius and the sirens.
From the page, I was a little concerned that the end came too easy. Upon re-reading I was wrong. You did a fantastic job crafting a finale in which a ballet of flaws saves the day without it feeling coincidental or trite for that matter.
All in all you created a story that combined wit with action and you did it well. I would say don't be afraid to explore the wonderful world and characters you created. Your natural pacing works well for your benefit. Take advantage of that to explore your depths.
Last but not least, it was fun and at the end of the day that's why we all do this. Never lose sight of that!
Review of: Cody Dumas: Demon Hustler
reviewed by BSKling on 07/23/2011
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