Other Reviews by sibryce 80

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  A nice little ride
  A review of The Car and Candice
  by sibryce on 11/19/2010
  I'm really not sure what to say, about this one. I have a taste for black comedy, so the sardonic wit you display here appealed to me, of course. It's definitely good to see a story about a slacker chauffeur and a high-class hooker that isn't vulgar or a wannabe porno, and manages to keep you from thinking it could ever be either of those things. You even handled the barking... I'm really not sure what to say, about this one. I have a taste for black comedy, so the sardonic wit you display here appealed to me, of course. It's definitely good to see a story about a slacker chauffeur and a high-class hooker that isn't vulgar or a wannabe porno, and manages to keep you from thinking it could ever be either of those things. You even handled the barking scene in a way that was cute and funny, while other writers could have just made that part sleazy.
  
  I think my only complaint is that some parts could perhaps be a little tighter, but it's not a major problem by any means. You've done another good one. read
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  Old gag, but a new twist
  A review of The Sown
  by sibryce on 11/18/2010
  Well, if someone was ever going to borrow so heavily from "Alien", this was a good way to do it -- by changing the creature very dramatically. I also commend you on the idea of making highly evolved fungi the final culprit, as there's probably nothing more dangerous than that which doesn't intend to be dangerous. Other than being highly similar in tone and premise to "Alien"... Well, if someone was ever going to borrow so heavily from "Alien", this was a good way to do it -- by changing the creature very dramatically. I also commend you on the idea of making highly evolved fungi the final culprit, as there's probably nothing more dangerous than that which doesn't intend to be dangerous. Other than being highly similar in tone and premise to "Alien" -- which we covered already -- the only problem I can think of, is that a lot of this story could have been removed, and the same effect made. Now, drawing the story out does enhance suspense in a lot of ways, but it also tells the reader things he or she has already figured out -- or worse still, give them a chance to get ahead of you. read
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  This is it?
  A review of Koz Baker
  by sibryce on 11/15/2010
  Don't worry, that's ultimately a good headline; it means I'd like to see more of this story. This is definitely a very quirky and darkly funny story. Even to someone like me, who knows little about baseball, it was very easy to understand because what little jargon you use, you break down into universal terms. More importantly, of course, you focus more on the people, who... Don't worry, that's ultimately a good headline; it means I'd like to see more of this story.
  
  This is definitely a very quirky and darkly funny story. Even to someone like me, who knows little about baseball, it was very easy to understand because what little jargon you use, you break down into universal terms. More importantly, of course, you focus more on the people, who are both entertaining and very real.
  
  The only complaints I can make are mostly minor; there are a couple of times when a new character speaks in the middle of a paragraph, which is an easy nit-pick to fix. Also, as I said, the story feels like it just stops, in what would be the end of a movie's first act -- this is when you've explained who the title character is, why he's important, and set up that he might very well fix the baseball team... and you just drop the whole thing.
  
  So whether you expand this story, or just do a sequel, please PLEASE write more about this! read