I know we're supposed to give constructive criticism but come on...
You just threw this together. Not only did it not have a story, you were talking about handi-cap or in your case "retarded" people. Honestly I didn't even get it. I wish we were able to pick the things we review so I could have skipped this one and not talk down upon it, but good golly miss molly. The only thing that could have made this worse is if it went on any longer.
One thing good to say about it... It was slightly funny in an offense way.
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