Other Reviews by DJBFilmz 30

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  DJB's Review
  A review of Pride Of Lyons (2012)
  by DJBFilmz on 10/25/2012
  I’ll start off by saying that I like this script. Quick read, funny in some areas to me (other parts are most likely funnier to others who are older than I) and you seem to have a good flow/structure here. So overall I think it’s good. Broad comment: I think this is targeted toward an older group, because some of your jokes just didn't hit it for me, but I could see others... I’ll start off by saying that I like this script. Quick read, funny in some areas to me (other parts are most likely funnier to others who are older than I) and you seem to have a good flow/structure here. So overall I think it’s good.
  
  Broad comment: I think this is targeted toward an older group, because some of your jokes just didn't hit it for me, but I could see others laughing. Other comments below:
  
  Pg. 2. Is Bryce male or female? Thought it was female by the name.
  
  In fact I would state all characters, male or female considering some of their name.
  
  If Danny is such a good actor, why is he caught by Ian in the beginning?
  
  You use the word “So” and “Well” a lot. It’s distracting, seems to come off as a little amateur.
  
  Pg. 66. I think Norman bursting through Danny’s door should come before Danny saying he was supposed to meet Norman.
  
  Pg.70. You have an EXT slugline with no scene direction? How do we know what the place looks like?
  
  Pg. 76. VAN: That’s two! Why don’t you two get a room? – I don’t understand this line.
  
  Did Kristin tell Danny about the scheme or did he read some papers explaining it? Why doesn't she just tell him in a word?
  
  Danny is late forties, let’s say 47, Kristin is late twenties, let’s say 27. A twenty year difference and they’re getting hot and heavy? Could their ages be just a little closer? Maybe this is just me.
  
  Pg. 98. How does someone hum stripper music and you have INT. COURTROOM, but we have no scene direction. read
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  DJB's Review
  A review of The Carved Pumpkin
  by DJBFilmz on 08/31/2012
  I liked this short. When a film makes me wonder how you got some of the shots then it's defin a plus for me. Also very creative I thought and a bit weird in a good way. Also like your use of sound, it was very pro. There's not much negative I have beside quality but that could just be because of the web. Good work! - David
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  DJB's Review
  A review of Lost in Civilization
  by DJBFilmz on 08/24/2012
  Wow... Okay this is a PSA? What can I review about this??? I honestly don't know. It was good, but so short I don't know what to think. Maybe you could expand this short. Show how society is making this man put a gun to his head. He looked liked he was really stressed out lol. Overall it was a decent watch, I don't feel like I wasted my time. Good luck in the future... Wow... Okay this is a PSA?
  
  What can I review about this??? I honestly don't know. It was good, but so short I don't know what to think. Maybe you could expand this short. Show how society is making this man put a gun to his head. He looked liked he was really stressed out lol.
  
  Overall it was a decent watch, I don't feel like I wasted my time.
  
  Good luck in the future.
  
  - David read