Review of: Twelve Twelve Twelve
reviewed by **DELETED ACCOUNT** on 01/29/2011
This is a fantastic, if disturbing story. The author really captures the fear and life of the main character with very vivid descriptions. Each tick, each obsession is covered in a very short amount of time. Interspersed with her thoughts and horrors of her attacker. There is a great buildup until the end, with a twist. This is a very entertaining story that tells a lot in only a few pages. Thanks for the opportunity.
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