The Car and Candice introduces us to some of the best character-driven story telling that I’ve read in quite a while. With only an aging limo driving amidst the backdrop of California wildfires, the story advances smoothly on the power of Max and Candice and their brief encounter.
The structure is flawless, and the dialogue believable and interesting.
There are only two areas I’d suggest that could be improved, and both are subjective. First, I’d dispense with the drug use. I personally don’t think it does anything to develop Max’s character, and only serves as a needless distracter.
Second, and this may be by the conscious choice of the author, we never get a full appreciation for Max’s motivation for his 30 minutes with Candice. Was it really just ti hear her voice? His gallant treatment of her at the end suggests otherwise. I suppose this question may have been purposefully unanswered, but I felt something missing.
Great job. The author has demonstrated real storytelling skill with this one.
Review of: The Car and Candice
reviewed by W.E. Linde on 02/01/2011
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