Review of: Out of the Badlands (3rd Draft) 

reviewed by loque9 on 01/24/2011
Credited Review
Exciting and Beautifully Conceived Credited Review
I am not the typical audience for a western, but this script is just terrific. You had me locked in by page 10. Your first act is built beautifully. The characters are vivid. Dialogue wonderful and the actions scenes just plain sing. I guess that's the sign of a great script. No matter the tastes of the reader, you win them over anyway by creating a compelling tale. You've certainly done that here for me.

What needs work? In my opinion, just one bit of business:

Elizabeth monologue on page 34 and Matthias monologue on 35 - a bit sappy and cliched. Prior to that you had a script where characters said very little but what they did say carried a lot of weight and depth. Furthermore, I didn't take Matthias as the type who would pour his heart out like that. Prior to this, I saw him as Clint Eastwood. After the speech, I saw Clint Howard.

The indian fight at the 60 page turn was great. The little bit of business between Jefferson and his gun is a nice touch. The revelation at page 72 keeps the story chugging ahead.

Overall, I've got nothing but compliments for this. It's a tight script, well written, energetic and colorful. And to think I was dreading the thought of reading a western. Kudos.

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